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    dots Submission Name: hEY MAN,dots
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    Author: Hiruetske
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 10/16/8
    Words: 424
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 843
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2826



    Description:
       it MiGht bE kiNdA hARd tO UNdERStANd, bECAUSE Of hOW MUCh i CAN PUt iNtO ONE liNE, NOt tO MENtiON MY UNUSUAl WAY Of tYPiNG. ENjOY, PEOPlE, MY fiRSt GOVERNMENt bASEd RiP.


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    dotshEY MAN,dots
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    hEY MAN, lOOk At ME NOW,
    GOt MY OWN MUSiC VidEO.
    bEltS fAlliNG OUt thE lOOP
    With thE bRAiNWASh ANtidOtE.
    tEMPlE Of thE MEtAl ShAft With
    thE bUllEt Of ENliGHtENMENt.
    bUt YOU dON't kNOW thE GUN,
    SO thE tRiGGER ESCAPES YOUR hANdS.

    thEY ONlY kNOW WhAt thEY lEARNEd iN hiGh SChOOl.
    (Old RUStY MAGNUMS)
    YOU All thiNk YOU'RE jUSt SO dAMN COOL?
    (thAt iS UNtil WE bURNEd YOUR dRUMS)
    tEChNOlOGiES YOU hidE fROM OUR liVES.
    (YOU StEAl it fROM OUR StREEtS WhEN WE MAkE SOMEthiNG bEttER)
    WhEN ChildREN kNOW YOUR SMilES hidE thE liES!
    (thEY'll dO it EVEn if YOU dON't lEt 'EM)
    thEY ONlY kNOW WhAt thEY lEARNEd iN hiGh SChOOl.
    (Old RUStY MAGNUMS)
    YOU All thiNk YOU'RE jUSt SO dAMN COOL?
    (thAt iS UNtil WE bURNEd YOUR dRUMS)
    tEChNOlOGiES YOU hidE fROM OUR liVES.
    (YOU StEAl it fROM OUR StREEtS WhEN WE MAkE SOMEthiNG bEttER)
    WhEN ChildREN kNOW YOUR SMilES hidE thE liES!
    (thEY'll dO it EVEn if YOU dON't lEt 'EM)

    SO MAN, WhAt dO YOU thiNk Of ME
    NOW thAt i hAVE All thE PiECES?
    dON't it PiSS YOU Off
    thAt i CAN USE MY lifE AS EVidENCE?
    AGAiNSt YOUR hiGhER UPS thAt
    ONlY GiVE A Shit AbOUt thEMSElVES?
    thOSE WRiNkly, CRiNklY Old bAStARdS
    thiNk thEY CAN jUSt dAMN US All tO hEll!?

    thEY ONlY kNOW WhAt thEY lEARNEd iN hiGh SChOOl.
    (Old RUStY MAGNUMS)
    YOU All thiNk YOU'RE jUSt SO dAMN COOL?
    (thAt iS UNtil WE bURNEd YOUR dRUMS)
    tEChNOlOGiES YOU hidE fROM OUR liVES.
    (YOU StEAl it fROM OUR StREEtS WhEN WE MAkE SOMEthiNG bEttER)
    WhEN ChildREN kNOW YOUR SMilES hidE thE liES!
    (thEY'll dO it EVEn if YOU dON't lEt 'EM)

    YO MAN, WhAdYA thiNk Of US
    NOW thAt WE All kNOW thE tRUth?
    YOU kNOW WE dON't GiVE A Shit
    AbOUt YOUR SO-CAllEd SECREt WEAPON YOU Call
    RUth---lESS---NESS
    GO MAN, RUN AWAY!
    YOU hidE bEhiNd YOUR fANCY lEAthER SEAtS
    YOUR WAllEt'S Still SO fAT.
    (hEY MAN, YOU tOOk MY MONEY!)
    YOU kNOW thAt WE kNOW thAt EVERY lASt ONE Of US
    iS liViNG PROOf, Of thE fACt thAt...

    thEY ONlY kNOW WhAt thEY lEARNEd iN hiGh SChOOl.
    (Old RUStY MAGNUMS)
    YOU All thiNk YOU'RE jUSt SO dAMN COOL?
    (thAt iS UNtil WE bURNEd YOUR dRUMS)
    tEChNOlOGiES YOU hidE fROM OUR liVES.
    (YOU StEAl it fROM OUR StREEtS WhEN WE MAkE SOMEthiNG bEttER)
    WhEN ChildREN kNOW YOUR SMilES hidE thE liES!
    (thEY'll dO it EVEn if YOU dON't fUCkiN' lEt 'EM)
    lEt 'EM, lEt 'EM, lEt 'EM, lEt ME GO!!!!!

    (ENd!)




    Submitted on 2005-12-28 12:29:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmm, this is a song that really makes you think. and the writing didnt help ><, but I really liked this, good work :)
    I really liked the stuff in parathesis, kinda funny. But yeah, really good
    | Posted on 2008-03-31 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]
      I get the ending, but the begining is sort of hard to understand. Is this about Bush? Or something else. I might have totally missed the meaning. But I like it, and the way you type adds emphasis. The fourth paragraph is really good. Nice job.
    x
    Caroline.
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by mysweetsuicide | [ Reply to This ]


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