Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: HIDDEN LOVEdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: submarine
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 119/89/40
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 312
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 712



    Description:
       this poem i wrote a wile ago.... when i really liked this guy but i know that if he knows it would not be rite..... its a long story... but i have to wait for the rite time....


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsHIDDEN LOVEdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I LOVE YOU,
    BUT I CAN'T TELL,
    I WANT TO BADLY,
    BUT I CAN'T AFFORD TO.
    I PRAY TO OD FOR YOU,
    THAT'S ALL I CAN DO,
    AND MY LOVE WILL REMAIN.....
    HIDDEN.

    I CLOSE MY EYES,
    AND I SEE YOU,
    I'M IN A CROWD,
    BUT I STILL FEEL YOU.
    I LOOK UP AT THE HEAVENS,
    AND OFFER UP A PRAYER,
    TO HELP KEEP THIS LOVE....
    HIDDEN.

    WHEN I LOOK AT YOU,
    MY HEART SWELLS.
    YOUR EYES....
    MAKE ME WANT TO BURST.
    AS I TURN AWAY,
    I ASK GOD WHY?
    AND WITH TEARS IN MY EYES, I KNOW,
    THIS LOVE WILL HAVE TO STAY....
    HIDDEN.






    Submitted on 2005-12-28 23:51:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this, I took this as an isecurity issue, for me, I'm just fearful of rejection... and I'm pretty sure that this has a seperate meaning, but I just took it that way... I loved your work, I loved how you said hidden in the stanza's, it made it complete, it reiterated that the time needs to be right, when you finally let him know that you have a feeling for him... but umm why is this all in caps???
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry
    This user has been inactive for more than 5 days.