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Author: Sanjhana
ASL Info:    21/f/India
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Words: 49
Class/Type: Poetry /Happy
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there's not much to it.. its just about the simplicity of happiness.


a dream
a smile
a beer
a cigarette
a conversation
a party
a book
a movie
a sunrise
a sunset
a strum
a song
a mountain
a beach
a helmet
a bike
a hug
a kiss

Submitted on 2005-12-29 03:21:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this song, cause it takes the ordinary things of our everyday life, which we don't usually consider happy or sad - just ordinary, like a beer or a sunset, but put together like this, with the neverending refrain "happiness" forms one experience into the reader to look back in his day to see how many happy things he missed to notice that day. I like also the fact that there is not a persona in the poem, it focalises the things that are here for us, just to make us happy. And the best part - the poem is simple, short and very very objective.
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by evangelina | [ Reply to This ]
i get your idea of happiness...i get it(?)...
something like deriving it from things around you...
You've almost solidified know..took us to a shop...that was your'd us what is availible..and put it on a list.
but i think your idea is pristine....
| Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by Devrath | [ Reply to This ]
  Awwww it's simple but it's sweet. And it actually did make me smile just thinking about some of those things.
Keep Writing
| Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
  i love this... it's very compelling. you've managed to convey the meaning of happiness with such simplicity, but still so beautifully and realistically.

i like :D

great job!
| Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by Mud | [ Reply to This ]
  That sounds a lot like freedom to me. I think freedom a form of happiness. Lot of simple pleasures that we often forget to cherish. As for the poem, for what it is it is good, like a reminder that there is more to the would than your own ambitions. Thanx for the insight.
| Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]

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