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    dots Submission Name: A Heart Misguideddots
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    Author: Sugar
    ASL Info:    23/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.43 - 84/63/9
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1201
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1083



    Description:
       this is about a guy I got involved with when me and my ex split up... I got back with my ex but still got jealous when the other guy got another girl... It was a very confusing time, but I needed to get it off my chest!


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    dotsA Heart Misguideddots
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    My eyes find him
    Looking at me
    She speaks
    She steals the moment

    My angry heart stamps its feet in my chest
    But then I remember…

    I turn to the man beside me
    Patiently waiting for my attention
    And my heart begins to weep
    Like a child who’s been caught misbehaving

    His proud arms surround me
    As we stand amongst familiar strangers
    Curious glares burn into my skin
    Then I see her

    She stares angrily, opposite him
    Suspicion warping her features
    I smile
    She hates me

    My eyes find him
    He looks distant
    I follow his gaze to a different girl
    His next victim

    I see now who he really is
    And my heart begins to laugh
    But then I remember…

    I turn again to the beautiful man beside me
    As he whispers “I love you”
    I don’t doubt it for a second
    He’s told me no less than a thousand times

    And for once, my heart was listening.




    Submitted on 2005-12-29 04:06:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked your storry alot. It maid me think about love alot and its always good to think about that.check out my Moma poem.
    | Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem that tells a story of a difficulty time and some feelings that are not easy to deal with. I think we have all been here before at some point in our lives and it is difficult to figure out what motivates these kinds of emotions and why do we feel the way we do. This is well written and expressed and gives plenty of detail to give the reader a sense of the whole picture. Nice work. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem rally touched my heart. I've felt the pain of jealousy and it really shows alot about the author and their feelings. This is excellent. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by kihyajacqueline | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my god this is perfect, so chockful of emotions, honest and pure, look at me I'm as giddy as a school girl. I am loving everything about this piece from start to finish, I have nothing bad to say about it at all. Congratulations on a job well done.

    Kuddos,
    Jermaine.
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Great write! Gives strength to those who fall hard in love and find it hard at times to let go, even participate again. Real strong and true. Valid poem of real love. Thanks. Keep up the good work. xoxoxo
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by UNIQUEWOODS69 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This poem is great! I think that it's kind of like a story. Also... it's so true, sometimes the greatest person in the world could be sitting next to you, but you're too busy obsessing over somebody else to notice. I loved this part though:

    I turn to the man beside me
    Patiently waiting for my attention
    And my heart begins to weep
    Like a child who’s been caught misbehaving

    His proud arms surround me
    As we stand amongst familiar strangers
    Curious glares burn into my skin
    Then I see her
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]


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