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    dots Submission Name: The Crow Mandots
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    Author: nodrelsnef
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 22/32/29
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Crow Mandots
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    The Crow Man

    I know a man who says he became a crow.
    I says, Did you really become a crow
    Or was it all in your head?
    He says, All I know is I became a crow.
    I says, But was it all in your head?
    He says nothing to me
    And walks away over the hills.
    Later that day I feel so lonesome I could die.





    Submitted on 2005-12-29 20:06:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your tenses bother me. although it should be the least of my worries when it comes to this.
    a crow man.
    i don't know what I see as symbolism. or allegory. or meaning. this is hard on me. i'm trying to see what aimee_ sees.
    there's is nothing too much and nothing too little, because i dont' see what you're going for. so you couldnt' have missed it.
    your last time sounds real similar to a line from Catcher in the Rye.
    but i don't understand why you feel depressed. maybe that's the problem.
    | Posted on 2006-01-01 00:00:00 | by denial | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe i'm just reading this poem wrong or something, but i'm really confused by it...but i think that as long as it makes sense to you then it doesnt matter if it does to anyone else
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by josephina | [ Reply to This ]


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