i found this to be very interesting. nice title,i thought it matched very well to everything..i found a couple of metaphors & it was awsome when i did. i too had to read it over again but im glad i did. lol. -fakeness
excellent! You don't see much open verse that is actually good...most of it us just a story with fewer adjectives lol...excellent...it flowed well, and the wording and vocabulary were excellent. The metaphors and similies are well hidden but are very awesome when found...5 star material.