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    dots Submission Name: My brain is a CPUdots
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    Author: Universal
    ASL Info:    17/f/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 46/48/35
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Bytes: 652



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    dotsMy brain is a CPUdots
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    Tracked and swelling networks imitating connections

    Farcical lyrical pandemonium of jilted conveyances

    Menacing mechanical ability dissolving biological inequality

    Censored edited numerical messages wavering

    Vast expanses buried beneath surging metal strings

    Online churches feature “Cyberspace conversion”

    Cybernetic trance induced everyday procedures

    Encapsulated bubbles housing disconnected bodies

    Welcome to the age of technology, the advance of modern man

    Welcome to our last frontier, our computerized reality




    Submitted on 2005-12-30 01:46:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i found this to be very interesting.
    nice title,i thought it matched very well to everything..i found a couple of metaphors & it was awsome when i did.
    i too had to read it over again but im glad i did.
    lol.
    -fakeness
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by (fake_sanity) | [ Reply to This ]
      nice use of words. i had to read this one over a couple of times to understand it in whole. I'm kind of slow like that ^.^;;
    | Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by draco-joe | [ Reply to This ]
      excellent! You don't see much open verse that is actually good...most of it us just a story with fewer adjectives lol...excellent...it flowed well, and the wording and vocabulary were excellent. The metaphors and similies are well hidden but are very awesome when found...5 star material.

    Storm
    | Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]


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