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    dots Submission Name: song of the daydots
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    Author: namesdontmatter
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/89/29
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotssong of the daydots
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    my day began with $2
    the price of life
    .50 for gum, .50 for pain
    then a dollar at Mcdonalds
    the green converse are $40
    the consumerism consumes me

    Tainted Love(the original not Manson)
    is my soundtack for today
    gives me extra bounce
    and yes its the song not the speed
    my emoticon for today shall be the laughy face
    im tired of crying

    i remember to wear the necklace
    i can feel it there always
    just like i can feel the space around me
    too aware there is noone there
    lifes cruel joke on someone who hates to dance alone
    i guess ill just keep on singing to myself
    "take my tears and thats not reall all tainted love"




    Submitted on 2005-12-30 15:06:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a pretty powerful poem. I liked the conistency and how it wasn't too long in yet it was very good. With the exception of a few spelling errors I say this is a very good poem, good job!
    | Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]


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