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    dots Submission Name: Choppa-Gundots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 606
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1468



    Description:
       Song about a favorite gun


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    dotsChoppa-Gundots
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    [robbin hood]-
    You know we do it like that/
    got that choppa gun in my lap/
    don't be lookin when you hear that ak47 clap/
    you know it coming from that 64 lac/
    shot you in the face/
    17 seconds later i'm the only one left in the place/

    [maninthemirror]-
    17 minutes later I step through the door/
    seeing hood standing over the dead in the floor/
    all i can do is laugh as I'm walking up to em/
    these bitches laugh and shit now see what happened to em/
    they dead, hoes dont come back/
    They in the trunk of the lac, when that choppa gun clap/

    [robbin hood]-
    kings back on the attack/
    ak 47, you can't top that/
    with a drum attached/
    killa is the way i act/
    I get my respect, one day/
    I'm hot, but not too hot to get ont he block and play/

    [maninthemirror]-
    Bang Bang Bang/
    My thoughts are diranged/
    Like Mike Myers with a lil' Buddha/
    And I'm smooth like ghandi, just a lil' rudda/
    put in another clip of the aberrant flow/
    fuck with the kings, we'll come to your show/

    [robbin hood]-
    Money on my mind/
    47 when I'm on the grind/
    I'm ahead of my Time/
    I'm ahead of my ryme/
    All day Ak, you know/
    fully atomatic, now thats my flow/





    Submitted on 2005-12-31 01:24:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yo man, this [censored] is hot, the bull hot wit it too. I like how ya'll went back and forth with the short rhymes, rhymes were tight too. I have a habit of rapping this way and poeple don't really [censored] with it, like I'm really out here killing poeple, anyway as always, keep up the good work!

    Singlerose:)
    | Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by SingleRose | [ Reply to This ]
      i think this was pretty original the way y'all did a bunch of short, interchanging flows. it seemed kinda redundant though. like u were just saying the same thing over and over. i didn't know u guys liked guns so much. personally i think guns are for pussies. but if i had to be in war i'd try to be a sniper
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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