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    dots Submission Name: Fade Into Realitydots
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    Author: RyukiTZR
    ASL Info:    14/F/-
    Elite Ratio:    3.94 - 133/130/44
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 401
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 879



    Description:
       I really have NO IDEA what I'm trying to express or explain here.....


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    dotsFade Into Realitydots
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    I have been lying here,
    For so long, perhaps too long.
    Comfortably numb,
    I shut my eyes and ears.
    And just don't wanna get out of here.

    But the colours,
    The colours of my dreams.
    They start to fade
    And dissapear so far.
    Like something unreachable,
    Like a lonely night star.

    I keep asking myself.
    Did I want this to go on,
    Or to make it come to an end?
    Cuz reality hurts
    Like scars; unable to mend.

    I couldn't help myself,
    The more I wished to sink in further,
    The more I reach up to the surface.
    And I didn't like it,
    When white lights blinded my eyes.

    When its gone,
    There I am,
    In the real world,
    In the real me...
    I had,

    Fade into reality.




    Submitted on 2005-12-31 01:30:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i felt this was a journey, you started laying on the floor and then you floated off into your subconcious and the description is very strong. This really is a wonderful poem. It remided me of a description i was once given of an out of body experience once. Don't worry aboiut not knowing what your writing about, i never did but believe me you'll read your work back when your an old duffer like me and you'll remember what you were feeling and thinking. Keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by Topher Vine | [ Reply to This ]
      It's okay, us poets tend to write poetry when we dont truly know what we are feeling, hence we express our emotions in worded form.
    Just the same as artists use art, we use words as well. this my friend is a form of self-expression and you have a spectacular gift...especially when you are able to write such a magnificant poem, and not know why.


    Well done
    -Sharon
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      If you the writer don't know what you're trying to express, the reader doesn't either. It's just pretty words, then.
    You seemed to have an idea when you started, the first stanza is solid, the second stanza is as well. But you begin to lose the idea and conviction.
    I'd re-think this, it's good, it just needs more direction.
    and disappear, not dissapear.
    happy new year!
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]



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