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    dots Submission Name: Having Fundots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 770
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 519



    Description:
       OK, I know I am being bad. I should know better, should have more respect for others, but sometimes I lose control. It overtakes me and there is nothing I can do about it. This is definitely hardcore punography. I apologize in advance.


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    dotsHaving Fundots
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    They made love… again
    Then came the buzzing
    It hovered near his ear
    Seventeen minutes he said

    They wrapped in passion
    Followed by the high hum
    Speaking its evaluation
    Twenty-four this round

    She said wait a minute
    I hear the fleeting noise, but
    How can you tell the intervals
    With such delicate precision?

    His reply was quick
    Yes, isn't it amazing
    How flies time
    When you are having fun




    Submitted on 2005-12-31 12:12:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      There's been alot of buzz going around about these creatures.
    Seems when they pass by your head it's like a lap of the Indy 500 going by,

    and that woman he was with...

    she was getting her pants off the whole time!!! I think he was counting them, that's how he knew!! some of them were mighty deep too....whoa,

    punographic indeed, how can you do this to us?? hehe..
    you blazing vigilante voyeur!

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      these two were just buzzing...what fun!!
    nice, light hearted playful piece
    I guess you know what happened when they tested out a computer to see how much it could understand ( rather than merely calculate)
    They keyed in
    'time flies like an arrow'
    and the computer came back with
    ' fruit flies like a banana'
    but I digress. Your poem is sharply witty
    LOL
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by ertha | [ Reply to This ]
      Very clever and very funny :)...i have to agree with Graeme..leaving it right until the end was very clever and perfectly timed :)
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      hahahaha, fair dinkum, what a pun!

    I do like the way you kept it hidden till the punch line, it gives it so much kick that way!

    Nicely done, and badly funny...

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm kind of with DanceADream...I don't really understand it. I mean, it did create some awesome visuals, but I have no idea what it all means...
    Keep Writing
    -Caribou-
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      ok. i had to read this a couple of times...before it got to me...i still don't really understand it much. im sorry! i usually do understand poems...and i get that this was about time passing by it was just confusing. i will make up for it by doing a proper comment on your featured piece
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know why no one read or commented on this one. guess they were all asleep! sometimes I think some of them are asleep anyway even when they read and comment! I like this and wish time would fly for me soon. nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]


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