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    dots Submission Name: Who I Be?dots

    Author: AnointedPoetess
    ASL Info:    22/Fe/MN
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 127/178/49
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWho I Be?dots

    Who I be you might say or be thinking?,
    Well I'll tell you and its a humorious, deep,and strong person,
    Who is loving herself more with each day while discovering the little things among the big,
    That make me, me!,
    Divalicious I see myself as even though the mirror may dictate who I am,
    Even though It's hard to look at myself for the beauty that I truly am,
    I know I'll be helped along the way,
    God will help me and see me through,
    no matter the test, storm, or trial,
    I just need to openly and with my whole heart
    confidently declare who I am in God,
    For all the world to see,
    Self confidence I need to desperately gain,
    if I'm going to survive in a harsh world such as this,
    No longer affected by others thoughts of what they think of me,
    Because I will finally know who I be and am,
    On the inside and out.

    Submitted on 2005-12-31 12:29:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've always told you to be you and be happy about that. Never let any one or any thing around you bring you down. You deserve to love yourself and should love yourself...for you are the only one you must live with and be content with every day. Always have faith in God and know that He has made you just the way that He wanted you. You are special to Him. Even though at times you look at exactly the opposite.

    Much love lil c!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought it was good but i think more elaboation was needed but a good (work in prigreess)but i like the way you knoww yourself in this poem and what you need to do in life
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by broncoboy05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely done, but it seems rushed. Take time to slow down and explain what you are feeling clearly. I get the feeling that you are someone who depends a lot on others (which I know is true from the conversations we have on IM, but I digress) The feel was slightly distracted by the "speed" of the words. Next time, slow down and let yourself flow into the writing a little more and you'll be fine. Overall, a nice piece!
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by E.S. McLaughlin | [ Reply to This ]

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