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    dots Submission Name: Society's Miscarriages dots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSociety's Miscarriages dots
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    the swifts of her brush leave painted incisions
    detailing strokes down to pinpoint precision
    beautiful artwork as her own life's ambition
    and they said that the blind would never have vision

    emotional memories pour out from his hands
    strings on the acoustic, into his own personal band
    insatiable tunes that would attract many fans
    the blind hear it perfect, but as a deaf mute he cant

    she paints to his music while he plays for her art
    and being disabled never kept them apart
    oblivious to their work, it still comes from the heart
    talent has guided them straight from the start

    frustration has builded and their minds have it caught
    unable to experience their work are their thoughts
    punches and screaming leave their peacefullness fraught
    'the disabled are useless' is what society taught




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      very true
    | Posted on 2013-10-09 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem. Its amazing. You wrote it perfectly. "beautiful artwork as her own life's ambition and they said that the blind would never have vision" this is my favorite line. It all was really good. I love the portray of natures misstakes turnd to beauty. Very well done.
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    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      well this is different. it rhymes which is more than i can normally do! lost in the rhyme the first two stanzas did not seem to tie together but then if you keep reading/... it makes more sence! it was diffferent and a bit hard to discern
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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