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Author:	corruptedspirit
ASL Info:	26/Male/England (Swindon
Elite Ratio:	5.38 - 160/185/56
Words:	147

Class/Type:	Poetry/Comedy
Total Views:	282
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	912

Description:
I was bored and i haven't written a humourous piece before, i may not of written one now either. Just a little chuckle....

The Shallow Man dots

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Honey, I love you and all that you are,
I the goodies you hide within your bra,
Those flub-a-lubs of joy,
By far my favourite toy.

I love your legs and what's at the top,
I like teasing you untill you pop,
As your love juice begins to flow,
My manly bulge begins to grow.

You may munch upon corn on the cob,
I'll begin greasing you womenly hob,
The wetness will help my rod fit in,
Then the act of love is sure to begin.

I'll thrust and moan,
You'll grind and groan,
I'll blow my stack whilst still inside,
Then Johnny will shrivel and start to hide.

I'll look you in the eye
And thank you for the pie.
Then after clearing my throat with a cough,
I'll tell you i've had my fun and you may now just fuck off.

Submitted on 2006-01-01 07:55:14 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well, the feeling I get is that your making fun of the men who are like that. I still think it's funny.
And wonder if your point is also confusion between sex and love?
| Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by Amber lee | [ Reply to This ]
  I suspect another similar version can be found at any local pup, in the john? Another typical look at the inside of the writer instead of a look at a sublject the writer has chosen. Funny, well somewhat, I remember reading lots of these at my local watering hole. Different place, but same gross disrespect for women. On the other hand, so what. its just sex taken instead of given.
| Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
  ahhh man not too bad you must go read My Rubber Lover http://www.eliteskills.com/z/53256
anyway this is good the title is funny and true in a wayhaha I don't know why Aanyone would say anything about this being over the top in fasct it was rather tastefully done in my shallow eyes.
check it out let me know what ya think
Lt
| Posted on 2006-01-01 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
  Wheh he well. Ah I enjoyed reading this. Although i was gritting my teeth with sheer pain for this woman who is merely a toy for this man. I was laughing, with intense disgust. It reminds me of those sick porno films that your mate always has on their mobile phones. Don't ask! lol. Man= powerful. Woman = Object. Not my opinion, but the feeling i get. still, funny in a weird way. Cheers.

Mstr Rz
| Posted on 2006-01-01 00:00:00 | by master raz | [ Reply to This ]
  This is so horrible it's hilarious! You've taken an ignorant middle class stereotype, given it a 'shallow' layer of flesh and blood, and cranked out a supreme idiot who wouldn't know romance if it kicked him in the crotch. This is like viewing a bad movie just to laugh at the poor acting and production values. You may have offended a multitude of people with this write though (generally because they don't realize the true fool in this piece is the man, not the woman who's surely been turned off by this ridiculous come on). Just to be fair, you may want to write the woman's response to this satire. Take care. Bill.
| Posted on 2006-01-01 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  How intruiging...

Sorry for the sarcasm, I'm sure it was a humourous piece to write. "The Shallow Man" sure sums it up, although I doubt if you'd titled it "The Average Man" it would have made much difference.

I apologise for my lack of a sense of humour, I'm sure if I'd read it on another day it might have made me laugh.

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| Posted on 2006-01-01 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ]

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