Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Limerickdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Limerick/Comedy
    Total Views: 977
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 174



    Description:
       A cute limerick hatched by my kids (all 6 of 'em) on the way home from visiting grandma for the Holidays. We played "create a limerick" and this was the best.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsLimerickdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I once knew a silly armadillo
    Who liked to sleep on a spiked pillow
    However, in his dream
    He sprung a blood stream
    And cried like a weeping willow




    Submitted on 2006-01-01 11:54:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      This was a very cute limerick. Tres original and pretty funny. I have to say it made me giggle. Sometimes I don't think I get enough humor in my life. Thanks for writing stuff like this... it's so different from all the depressed angst poems on the site.
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      Very cute little piece here! I love to get with the kiddies myself and create cute limericks. You'd be surprised at some they can come up with.
    Thanks for sharing!

    Smiles,
    ~Linda
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Isn't it fun to see what the kiddies can come up with - it was pretty clean so they must be young! Hope your holidays were awesome and you all enjoyed each other! Happy New Year! Love,Peace,Joy & Smiles to share!
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Hehehehehehehe. *Laughs*
    Heeheehee * giggles*
    hohohohohoh* guffaws*
    Ok, it wasn't that funny. It's more chuckle level than guffaw level.

    Um, I've seen better, but it's not bad. You might want to change the rhythm of the second stanza; lymerics should be mercilessly rigid in following that certain lymericy rhythm.

    "I once knew a silly armadillo
    who slept on a pointy, spiked pillow"

    That's betta, I think.

    Pretty good, though.
    | Posted on 2006-01-01 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ]
      hee hee, that's cute.
    aawww, the poor little armadillo!
    i like armadillos (even if they are stupid enough to sleep on a spiked pillow), however, i must point out that armadillos have a very hard outer body shell, like a suit of, um, armor! those spikes must have been huge and sharp!

    but a cute little limerick, and by children!
    my, my, my. I always thought children were a waste of valuble time.

    yeah, sure i do!
    Avril54
    | Posted on 2006-01-01 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice, a Limerick that actually made me laugh. The rythem isnt quite right on the first line but the fact that its done by your kids is fantastic, always good to get children involved.
    | Posted on 2006-01-01 00:00:00 | by Smee | [ Reply to This ]
      that is well hmmmm rather cute happy new year by the way . any way you always do those silly things and never fail to put a smile on my face. well i need a cig so bye

    xoxo
    that girl
    | Posted on 2006-01-01 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]
      This is cute
    I dont read much limericks on this site but I do wish people would submit more
    I have been toying with the idea of writing a couple such as 4 limericks and putting them together into one write
    You brought back that idea to my mind
    I Thank You for that
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    86135

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    the living moment written by ShyOne
    Every..... written by jackz
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Etiquette written by saartha
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Love written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Summer written by layDsayD
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Carry written by saartha
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    AI written by poetotoe
    Ache written by rev.jpfadeproof
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    True Death written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Push written by JanePlane
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry