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    Author: Gini
    ASL Info:    14 girl Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 16/21/6
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 196
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    suicide!
    by:geena

    i hate my life
    its like a sick game
    a game filled with
    fights, heartbrake and pain
    but today will all end
    as for the game i quit
    no more heartbreak, pain
    or any of that shit
    i write a note to
    each of my best friends
    i write how even though
    im gone, our friendship never ends
    i look for a part of
    my wrist that is not cut
    i go into the bathroom
    and lock the door shut

    i grab my razor
    and cut my wrists real deep
    i get into the bath
    without a sound nor weep
    i think while the
    water takes away my last breath
    i left this life in
    such a fucked up mess
    when i finally close my
    eyes. the white light is near
    i cry but only once
    with one single tear

    deticated to:geenas fucked up life!!!




    Submitted on 2006-01-01 23:40:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      not bad, i enjoy readings i can relate to, this i can kinda, i dont think if i commet suicide it would be drowning myself tho, seems kinda dificult, but thats me, keep trying
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by CamDynasty | [ Reply to This ]
      This has no meaning, depressed poetry only makes you feel more depressed and isn't very poetic. Sorry to burst your bubble but it's true.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      right on. That is some real venting, couldn't have done better myself. It's rather blunt though. It could have been a bit more poetic. It was pretty good around the very end. I most likely would have stopped reading from the beginning if I weren't this bored. I ike the lines with the notes to your friends though. That is very thoughtful. Keep trying!

    ~Lilithe of the Dark Dreams
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Lilithe_Aislin | [ Reply to This ]
      quite a very sad poem and very dark although very well written and the structure was so strong and so touching but i think that you can try to look at the bright side of the moon.

    keep it up :)
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]



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