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    dots Submission Name: freestyle monkey rapdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 667
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1430



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       I dont' think this fits what I usually call this but fuck it right?... thiss'll prolly be my last one for a while....


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    dotsfreestyle monkey rapdots
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    this be third and the last of my freestyle rap, im out
    it seems I"ve lost the inspiration, what to sit and rap about
    I'll talk about shit that's goin on in my life
    I'll start with the good shit, and go on to the strife
    I lil while ago I had my two year anniversersy
    but that night turned bad, my baby mommas momma cursed at me
    we had few fights, but damn I fuckin love'er
    our fights just never stop us from jumpin under them covers
    I found so many people right here on Elite
    rap soldiers, Queen divas, people just too hard to beat
    but there's some bitches too, cause life can't be that nice
    ya know them people that you wanna cut,cut'em right
    then theres the shit happened to my grandpa
    wanna know its on my journal, when its gone then ask, yall
    my life seems to be turning upside down
    but I gotta keep my feet firmly on the ground
    if for nobody else, then for my family, and shit
    I notice when I need something they drop their shit and quit
    I need to be like that, homies in trouble get on a bitch with a bat
    family in trouble, ask'em just where it's at
    I think I'm done with my rhyme
    so untill next time
    try and stay outta trouble, I'll do the best I can form mine

    sincerely,
    a crippled mind




    Submitted on 2006-01-02 01:26:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      as a rap, this one wasn't that good, but as an outlet, it seemed like it worked. it was more of an insight into ur mind. i've seen much better from u and i know u'll just continue to get better.
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Well...great little lyrical rant you got going on here. I can feel pretty much all that you were saying. And all I can say...is that...everything happens for a reason and it is up to you to see and make the best out of everything. It is kind of hard at times to think of what to flow about...but...that isn't something that should discourage you. Just sit, and wait. Let the music find you. And...it will.

    Good luck with all your surroundings. Keep your head up and keep striving forward.

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      yeh i agree with gini these ant no eminem or brandon or 50 cent [censored] maybe u should practise a bit more b4 u go pubplic sorry where trying to save u the embrassenment
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Red Liquid | [ Reply to This ]
      This has no meaning i have no idea what kind of lyrics these are but they're not very good sorry to burst your bubble but it's true.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Gini | [ Reply to This ]


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