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    dots Submission Name: My Wifedots
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    Author: nodrelsnef
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 22/31/28
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       A prayer


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    dotsMy Wifedots
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    My Wife

    She lies in bed, too
    Sad to moan. A depth
    Of pain I have not known.
    Into her soul
    I cannot see. Give her rest
    Yet far from me. A life
    Of plenty, ill disturbed.
    Her torment real and
    Undeserved. Toss me, dead,
    To endless flame. But her preserve whole
    And without blame. Bless with
    Life, dreams full grown.
    Tonight in bed,
    Too sad to moan.






    Submitted on 2006-01-02 02:50:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this poem flows freely and passionately. it makes me think of the book "the color purple" have u read it? it's by alice walker.
    it seems like you love her so much that even though u want her with u, she'd be happier without you and u just want her to be happy. it' s lovely!
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by badfish | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful, fantastic flow and really emotional, I love the fact you didnt feel the need to have the rhymes at the end of lines. It feels like a train of thought and I really cant think of anything bad to say.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Smee | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very well writen and it made me think. It's one of the few good rhyming poems i have heard in ages. I cant think of anything wrong with this peice of work.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]
      I luv that it had soooo much expression & im not kidding its really good i luv it! well done!
    ;):):P
    I like this poem a lot im goin to add it to mi favourites.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Gini | [ Reply to This ]



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