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    dots Submission Name: all is not what it seemsdots
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    Author: dublhelix
    ASL Info:    18/m/perth australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 43/36/15
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 193
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 864



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       if you read this, gwen, this is for you.
    if you read this, ffion, this is ABOUT you.

    youve ruined way to many lives.



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    dotsall is not what it seemsdots
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    i spent some time with you tomorrow.
    it helped somehow to down my sorrow,
    like john donne my heart,
    to another due
    labours to admit thee.

    however tho does NOT seek to shine and mend.
    to burn and rend, to twisted and wend,
    the truth around your thoughts are dark.
    i am the whale. you are the shark.

    i shall compare thee to a foreign city.
    from afar, first seen, is clean and pretty.
    but given time the seediness shows.
    dank, dark, underbelly, dampened glows
    of familys hidden in decrepid slums.
    like that, your mind hides depths unseen
    depths most soiled, most unclean,
    that you try desperately to hide from the world.
    and project the image of shining summer.



    well screw you. AND your mumma.




    Submitted on 2006-01-02 05:37:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think whoever made you feel this way definatly is some low, denying soul, like he did something unforgivable. thats what i got from the poem, it was a bit difficult for me to inturpret becuase of the style you choose to use but thats just me. I can tell alot of thought went into this and it came out very well. Dont be the fall out.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh..Well...that was expressed quite well. Whoever they are they have to know by reading this they have cut it with you. Even though I might not put it quite as harshly, this was still a very well written and descriptive with beautiful imagery comparing one who is rotten inside to a city at first impression, mistaken for pretty. Fabulous write.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Mytee | [ Reply to This ]



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