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teenagers Life I am not a kid but i am not grown up, i love to wear black & pink cloathes somtimes i cry, somtimes i laugh, i love to hang out with friends hang out & do stuff I cant drink or smoke it can be a little tough, that doesnt stop from doing the stuff i want to, i still drink a lot i aint lying its true, I have friends that are goth, some are punk we do anythin we want to cut our wrists, get drunk, I hate it wen people judge me by the way i may appear i may look like a bad person but i still bleed, feel & cry tears, Nobody takes me seriously thats wat i really hate wat i do iz wat i do & only i can discover my own fate im sick of my parents trying to organise my hole life without my say i just have to sit back watch & obay fuck it im gonna make the most of my teen years without any worries, attachment forget any of the fears |
yeh i liked this poem but most of these points are true in a lil of everyones life and mine as well. i know how it feels to be grouped and criticised and poked and prodded im a freak as well i dont whear pink but i believe that you are what makes you different and as to parents [censored] them all.| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ] | I don't like the poem, but I do understand. Although I don't live like you do. | What I found anoying is the grammer and stuff. Why bother to write capitals and whole, instead of shortened words? after all, you're still a teen. >_< When you'd change that, I'd like it better right away. Do you realy want to get drunk, smoke and bleed? When you describe yourself like this, I understand people won't take you seriously. I'd say, try to make something of life and write if it makes you feel better, but I won't call it a poem another teen | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Darth Zeus | [ Reply to This ] | As another teen I understand exactly what you mean, sadly sitting and complaining that you're not understood wont achieve much but it can still help you feel better. Quite good flow, though it feels rushed but maybe it was an outpour of emotion. Keep writing and honeing. | Good luck Smee | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Smee | [ Reply to This ] | Well, Very good expression of a teen who knows nothing about life. Cutting and mamming yourself thats a high aim in life. Hanging out and drinking and doing what ever you want to do. Now that is a responsible person. Makes sense to me, Not. | Your write is honest and self centered. I applaud you for having come here to prove what most adults believe to be true. If you do become an adult and you change your attitude then when you have a child of your own hopefully you will not pass down the same idiotic crap thet you have spewed here today. So, after saying all this I still like the write itself. It is a honest self proclaiming piece. The write in itself is good. There a alot of grammar problems here but after reading the write I figure why give pointers on how to improve it if the writer has so much disregaurd for other and her parents. You still cry, laugh and bleed just like everyone else in the world. It is not a teen thing. It is a human thing. The only difference is that most people don't cut themself on purpose. The old saying that birds of a feather flock together is true. I don't know what your life is like and I hope it turns out right for you. Self expresssion is good and sometimes healthy. Respect Clyde | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ] | |