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    dots Submission Name: they Listendots

    Author: Jerilynn
    ASL Info:    59, woman, U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 68/66/20
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       I think this explains itself. I hope anyway.

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    dotsthey Listendots

    As I sit
    And gaze
    At the birds
    In my garden
    I watch
    How life goes on
    For them,
    Raising young,
    Finding food,
    At the ponds edge.

    I think that
    I am not seen,
    Nearly invisible,
    Just a pair of eyes
    Sitting quietly,
    Watching from the cover
    Of the swing.

    I fill the feeder,
    And the baths,
    Hang the houses
    Then I wait
    For the new tenants
    To arrive,
    Thinking I am
    Then I sit again
    And watch.

    On a chair
    Close by
    They land.
    They are looking
    Right into my eyes,
    Hello’ I say,
    They nod their heads
    And confer
    Thanks.’ they say
    And fly off
    To the feeder.

    Well, what do you know.
    They knew I was here
    All along.
    I smile happily.
    ‘Thank you’ I think

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      This is delightful! I keep bird feeders on my property, and all of God's creatures help themselves to the bounty. Every once in awhile, an appreciative bird will cock his head and send a look my way that seems to say "thank ya buddy"!

    It is written that God sees even the fall of a tiny Sparrow! There is a harmony in the Universe that only the sensitive feel, that reverberates a message that kindness and caring will resonate back to the sender but in even greater force.

    This beautiful poem has a philisophical mood that exceeds the written message, and it is very wonderful!

    Well done!
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece, it doesnt feel rushed and the tempo in general is subtle rather than dramatic, I must say that I can't see the comedy but it made me feel passive and slightly thoughtful and who knows, when the wether clears up
    I might sit
    And gaze
    At the birds.

    Very good
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Smee | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't think i see the comedy in this, but i lke it anyway! but, alas, everytime the swinging bird feeder catches my eye, the birds sense I'm looking at them and fly away...
    I have 4 birds of my own at home, and-OMIGOSH! ONE OF 'EM JUST FLEW PAST ME!
    skye must be playing with them..
    2 domestic parakeets, a Cayuga duck, and a Buck Orpington duck. Plus all the other wild birds who eat out of the feeder! AH! I LOVE BIRDS!

    good job on this piece

    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. It is something different from what i usually find here. the point of view is something i have thought of before but... would never think to write about.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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