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    dots Submission Name: Know Depressiondots

    Author: tmullins
    ASL Info:    37/F/Mo
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 127/149/41
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1000
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       just some depressing thoughts on depression. Let me know if I got it right or if I need medication!!

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    dotsKnow Depressiondots

    Curtains closed
    heat's on
    no shower for me
    no food I want
    no dreams to have
    no cares

    kids all gone
    no energy to clean
    no reason to be
    no time to keep
    no sleep

    no want
    no drive
    Am I alive?

    No happiness
    no sorrow
    no cure
    no tomorrow

    no smile,
    no joy,
    no laughter,
    no nothing.

    Submitted on 2006-01-02 12:06:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Depression is a theme that I feel gets a lot of attention poetically. I thought this piece was pretty good, but could use a little work grammar wise. I noticed that every stanza except for the last one and stanza #3 have punctuation. I think that if you added in a few commas in the other stanzas it would help balance out the poem punctuation wise.

    Depression is a sucky thing to deal with. I deal with it from time to time. I connected with the emotion of this poem. It helps to have felt what the writer felt and is writing about.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Ravenwood | [ Reply to This ]
      Now I know why you wrote the piece on smiles, it sounds like you need a few (and a long vacation from holiday 'relaxation', apparently). I'd say the time has come for some indulgence (the hot bath, the magazine, the drive to the country, whatever gets the juices flowing again), you are way overdue for a little 'alone' time. Nicely expressed little unemotional vent. Take care of yourself. Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Looks like those smiles you wrote about might come in handy here. Depression is as common as the common cold. It is real and it does make life numb at times.
    The trick is to see it for what it is. It is a kick in the pants that says you have run out of gas and need to refuel your life with something that will make you feel.
    I get depressed sometimes and sometimes I just don't care. Then I look at how far I have come in my life and recharge myself with those memories.

    Nice write here

    Respect and Admiration

    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]

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