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Submission Name: Nothing more dots

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Author:	Smee
ASL Info:	17/M/UK
Elite Ratio:	2.94 - 28/33/11
Words:	80

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	211
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	477

Description:
Wrote this in less than 5 minutes, its very rushed but it just my train of though.

Nothing more dots

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Give me grief and give me anguish
For I deserve, no, nothing more.
Show me pain and show me anger,
Silent weeping, leave me sore.

Help me fight the fear that I can’t
Give you everything you need.
Leave me with your smallest morsel,
On that morsel I shall feed.

Call me if you ever feel
There is something I could do.
Love me I will never ask.
For I know it would not be true.

Submitted on 2006-01-02 16:10:02 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  for a 5 minute poem, it came out pretty good.

it reminds me of my relationship w/ the one person i truly loved but he fell out of love with me.

def addn to my faves. i enjoyd this
| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
  I've really fallen out of love over the last few months and this piece has me really wanting to fall back into it. I dont know I might do just that. Thanks for that.

Be Blessed,
Jermaine.
| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
  Line #4 was really strong, it is a poem that catches you and brings you that point where these thoughts are. I feel like I been at the point before.. way to but those hard thoughts to words.
| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Artist4rent | [ Reply to This ]
  thats an awsome piece i'm not usually into all the love poems, they don't really interest me although this one is great, you portray someone that gives evrything they have got to a person who will never return the favour, the first stanza, really was the best, the last line of that stanza, just made me think. perhaps i should read more love poems
take care always
++My Pain++
| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by my pain | [ Reply to This ]
  this has a lot of pain in it thats y i like it.
i luv this poem it shows that people dont always love you bak all mi poetry has pain thats how i relate to this poem!
| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Gini | [ Reply to This ]
  im guesssing u love some1 that doesnt love u bak i can relate to that it really does suck but if true love is ment 2 be then time will only tell
| Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Red Liquid | [ Reply to This ]

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