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Fateful Day

Author: rocko
ASL Info:    16/m/indiana
Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 3 /2 /4
Words: 159
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
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this is originally a song i wrote for my band. the second paragraph is kinda confusing but it basically means depressed and lonly.

Fateful Day

One fateful day ill sacrafice everything i own just to say your mine.
i heir your foot steps on the floor, is that you walking out the door.
Everything you've done and everything you say will come back one fateful day.
all these tears I've cried, all the sleepless night.

I will make you pay!

One fateful day I'll realize that I'll no longer fly the skies.
My wings are cliped and I'm falling down, but I'll never hit the ground.
Eternal fall thats my life flaw and i cant feel at all.

I will make you pay.

Your fateful day has finally come and I'm lounding up the gun.
Sanity is gone and I'm walking slow, not quite sure where I'm gonna go.
I find myself at your grave stone and shot the ground thinking why did you go.
you are gone and your not coming back.

I can't make you pay.

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