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    dots Submission Name: ???dots

    Author: Leon Kennedy
    ASL Info:    15/m/La
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51/75/22
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    My friends think they know me,
    but the are too blind to see,
    all the things inside,
    which i so obviously hide,
    they dont know the pain or the agony,
    which i scream "help" for vainly,
    no one comes to my aid,
    no one helps me fight,
    no one answers my plights,
    because they are too blind to see,
    all my pain and agony...

    Submitted on 2006-01-03 00:54:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Short sweet and to the point! Myself and probably most of E.S. can relate to this. At times we all tend to hide our problems from our friends, just to keep from talking about it. Some people tend to keep everything inside... and that's not healthy!
    Great job,
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by D.C.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this. I wrote something with the same topic a while back. It good, just work on the flow a little. If you revise it a liitle more carefully it'd be batter
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by sweetme16 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece, the flow is slightly broken but lines like 'which I so obviously hide' make up and more for that, very strong thoughts. The rhyme is also slightly broken on the 7th line but over all a good poem.
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Smee | [ Reply to This ]

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