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should i sleep...

Author: cannibal
ASL Info:    18/f/MO usa
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well i feel like shite and this is what came out of me because of it. I know "not another suicide poem" yeah well i feel horrible at the moment. Like i just want to get the blade and run it across my arms because i know that it used to make me feel better. And when i get sad like this i can smell the blood and taste it in my mouth and it makes me hunger for the cuts that used to form on my arms. Eh i am so dramatic..whatever read it and tell me what you think...thanks.

should i sleep...

Should I sleep
Why sleep when you know that you will only wake
Wake to another day of disappointment
I am itchy in this skin
There are no scares but I can see them,
I can see the marks of past mutilation.
I yearn for death again.

This soul is sinking deeper in
This skin is growing hard
A shell that can not be cracked
I want to scratch at it
I want to satisfy the demon inside
(I can smell the blood and it smells so sweet)
She calls
Singing like a siren
But I will try to hold my ears
She can not get me here

And sleep is not satisfying
Sleep only brings more illusion to my reality
More want to my ever growing yearns
If I hold my breath will it stop
Sink deep into the water and watch the blood red bubbles as I fall deeper into the void
Will I slip away or will only a carcass remain
No soul inside
Body is all

So what is my complication
I am to deep in it
Sinking in its sand
No hand to grab me
(stop your struggling and let it swallow you whole)
Whispers from inside making there way to the surface
Springing there letters on my tongue
Bouncing in my mouth

Eyes must be blood red by now
Staring past the shallow nick nacks
(Burn them all)
A fleshy confession
An only human mistake

Submitted on 2006-01-03 02:32:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A subject not touched very often.Shocking and hardcore in every sense of the word,however and this is not to depress you even more,or cause more sleepless nights but i feel that i need to say this...USE MORE VISUALS...sleep deprivation is a sickness and if this is written realy well and studied outside of your zone you will be able to give the world a poem that speaks more than just flowers and a box of tissues. I like it, you can do better though,i believe everyone can!L
| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Louis Dcree | [ Reply to This ]
  yes. you should sleep. dreading tomorrow only makes the urge to die worse. it makes it all the more powerful. you know. not like I've never felt the same way... I think we all do, at some point in time, but... that's aside the point.
n_n;; I hope you don't mind if I leave out the critique and the "I REALLY LIKED THIS"--run of the mill commentry style--
but that's just what I have to say. for some reason I feel null to the entire WORLD PROCESS and it's sucha refreshing feeling...

sowwy for rambling ;-;
-love Mi
| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]

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