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    dots Submission Name: should i sleep...dots

    Author: cannibal
    ASL Info:    18/f/MO usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 47/47/15
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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       well i feel like shite and this is what came out of me because of it. I know "not another suicide poem" yeah well i feel horrible at the moment. Like i just want to get the blade and run it across my arms because i know that it used to make me feel better. And when i get sad like this i can smell the blood and taste it in my mouth and it makes me hunger for the cuts that used to form on my arms. Eh i am so dramatic..whatever read it and tell me what you think...thanks.

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    dotsshould i sleep...dots

    Should I sleep
    Why sleep when you know that you will only wake
    Wake to another day of disappointment
    I am itchy in this skin
    There are no scares but I can see them,
    I can see the marks of past mutilation.
    I yearn for death again.

    This soul is sinking deeper in
    This skin is growing hard
    A shell that can not be cracked
    I want to scratch at it
    I want to satisfy the demon inside
    (I can smell the blood and it smells so sweet)
    She calls
    Singing like a siren
    But I will try to hold my ears
    She can not get me here

    And sleep is not satisfying
    Sleep only brings more illusion to my reality
    More want to my ever growing yearns
    If I hold my breath will it stop
    Sink deep into the water and watch the blood red bubbles as I fall deeper into the void
    Will I slip away or will only a carcass remain
    No soul inside
    Body is all

    So what is my complication
    I am to deep in it
    Sinking in its sand
    No hand to grab me
    (stop your struggling and let it swallow you whole)
    Whispers from inside making there way to the surface
    Springing there letters on my tongue
    Bouncing in my mouth

    Eyes must be blood red by now
    Staring past the shallow nick nacks
    (Burn them all)
    A fleshy confession
    An only human mistake

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      A subject not touched very often.Shocking and hardcore in every sense of the word,however and this is not to depress you even more,or cause more sleepless nights but i feel that i need to say this...USE MORE VISUALS...sleep deprivation is a sickness and if this is written realy well and studied outside of your zone you will be able to give the world a poem that speaks more than just flowers and a box of tissues. I like it, you can do better though,i believe everyone can!L
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Louis Dcree | [ Reply to This ]
      yes. you should sleep. dreading tomorrow only makes the urge to die worse. it makes it all the more powerful. you know. not like I've never felt the same way... I think we all do, at some point in time, but... that's aside the point.
    n_n;; I hope you don't mind if I leave out the critique and the "I REALLY LIKED THIS"--run of the mill commentry style--
    but that's just what I have to say. for some reason I feel null to the entire WORLD PROCESS and it's sucha refreshing feeling...

    sowwy for rambling ;-;
    -love Mi
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]

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