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    dots Submission Name: Peedie the peadots

    Author: Smee
    ASL Info:    17/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 28/33/11
    Words: 631
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
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       I wrote this for my little sister, Frances (more comonly known as Peedie), I was getting bored with writing sad, mopey poetry and this silliness is more like me in general.

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    dotsPeedie the peadots

    There once was a pod, that hung down to the ground
    And inside this pod there were peas.
    Now peas are all meant to be just the same
    But Peedie was not one of those.

    For Peedie had legs, at the end of were feet
    And at the end of these feet there were toes.
    But sadly for Peedie she had no face,
    No place for her eyes, mouth and nose.

    One fine day Peedie said to herself
    ‘This pod life just isn’t for me’.
    So she kicked out her legs, fell down to the ground
    No back pack or shoes I could see.

    She set out with pace and intention to find
    A new place that she could call home.
    But looking around at the grass and the trees
    She realised she couldn’t do it alone.

    She hiked a hard day, from her pod to the pond,
    Twenty feet is quite far for her size.
    It was then she looked up and to her terror she saw.
    A horrible green pair of eyes.

    She continued to stare, though she had no eyes to stare with
    It was only a frog, she thanked god.
    ’Hello my dear, mine names Frances, what’s yours?’
    All Peedie could manage was nod.

    Introductions aside, Frances sat down to eat
    She had bread and butter for tea.
    Peedie just sat and wished she could too
    For she had no mouth, don’t you see

    Frances was pleased if surprised to find
    A more adventurous pea than the rest
    ‘It wont take us long, so tomorrow we’ll go
    To a place which no doubt is the best.’

    So the next day they went, not a care in the world,
    Peedie sat on the frogs back.
    And it didn’t take long; the frog’s legs were strong
    To reach the place with a smack.

    Peedie looked up, and Frances looked with her
    And then she looked up some more.
    For though to Peedie this object was huge,
    To us it is only a door.

    ‘I must leave you here’ Frances then said
    ‘Climb up that ivy and see.
    Start your new life, hope all goes well’
    ‘Thank you and now I am free!’

    Peedie climbed up a thin branch of Ivy
    And slipped in through the keyhole.
    She dropped to the floor and ran from the door
    And set off in search of her goal.

    She ran through the hall and into a room
    Looked in and started to stare
    At the huge wooden and brown table leg
    Of the table that was standing there.

    She climbed up the leg and looked over the table,
    Her mouth open, agape
    At all her brothers and her sisters too
    Just lying there on a plate.

    She ran over to one and shook her quite hard
    ‘Come on, get up, its me!’
    She looked up and saw a huge fork descending
    ‘They’re going to eat you! Don’t you see!’

    She ran from the plate and across the table
    And jumped off onto a chair.
    She ran for her life and couldn’t look back
    At her siblings just lying there.

    She left the house, she found a way
    It just doesn’t matter how.
    And now we can see this lonely pea
    In the rain, crying out loud.

    ‘What is this place? It’s not the best
    This pod death just isn’t for me
    I’ll set off again, I’ll find more friends
    For this pea wants to be free!’

    So she set of again, no back pack or shoes
    Once again she was quite alone.
    I only hope that, for her sake, one day
    She found a place to call home.

    Submitted on 2006-01-03 07:41:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great work! You don't see stuff liek this on here very much...mos tof it is depressing...I'm glad to see something sort of silly and kid-like...great stuff. 5 Stars.

    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwwwww, I ABSOLUTELY ADORE your poem! At last, something warm and childish, just the thing we all need after having a difficult time! It's great to know that somebody thinks of writing children poetry, too! It was a very nice story, and your sister must be very proud you wrote it for her!
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Kalyiel | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it. It just seems odd. A story about a pea that has legs but no face. The ending is kind of sad. It is different. I wouldn't much like it for a childrens story unless we see Peedie's family live. Just never mind that. It is a story about a vegetable. I am sure chilcren can handle that.
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by St. Agatha | [ Reply to This ]

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