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    dots Submission Name: From Hate to Happinessdots
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    Author: painofthanatos
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 684/571/86
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
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       My exboyfriend turned out to be the asshole people warned me he could be...
    Now I'm moving onto some one else who is my dream guy - only I'm awake


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    dotsFrom Hate to Happinessdots
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    After months of your lying
    And me still believing
    I'm giving up on you
    And trust me, I'm won't be grieving

    Call me a whore
    But I'm already moving on
    To the sweetest guy
    Who wont do me wrong

    I met him months ago
    And purely by luck
    I was always 'playing nice'
    But now I don't give a fuck

    Because he's so close to perfect
    And he's so flippin' great
    We've got a lot in common,
    He's got me believing and fate

    And so not I'm sure there's
    A reason why we fell apart
    Because I'm so much happier
    With him in my heart




    Submitted on 2006-01-03 09:35:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Aww, this is really sweet. I loved how you just seemed to burst out and say "He's so flippin great", hehe that was cool. But on the last stanza...I really got hung up on the last sentence..it didn't make any sense to me.

    And so not I'm sure there's
    A reason why we fell apart

    I didn't get that...but the rest of the poem was great.

    Kris
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece of work, it really conveys the emotions of hate and happiness, as if they were battleing. I dunno that's just what i got, I know how it is, I think I like this one so much because I kinda just did the same thing. Well anyways I like the piece.
    Georgina
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Raye | [ Reply to This ]
      This could be a great piece about moving on to better things but with some speeling errors & word misplacement, it was kind of confusing. I understood the point of your piece & I've 'been there, done that' but it needs revision.
    ~Tonya
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Tonya V. | [ Reply to This ]


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