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From Hate to Happiness


Author: painofthanatos
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Class/Type: Rant /Misc
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My exboyfriend turned out to be the asshole people warned me he could be...
Now I'm moving onto some one else who is my dream guy - only I'm awake


From Hate to Happiness



After months of your lying
And me still believing
I'm giving up on you
And trust me, I'm won't be grieving

Call me a whore
But I'm already moving on
To the sweetest guy
Who wont do me wrong

I met him months ago
And purely by luck
I was always 'playing nice'
But now I don't give a fuck

Because he's so close to perfect
And he's so flippin' great
We've got a lot in common,
He's got me believing and fate

And so not I'm sure there's
A reason why we fell apart
Because I'm so much happier
With him in my heart




Submitted on 2006-01-03 09:35:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Aww, this is really sweet. I loved how you just seemed to burst out and say "He's so flippin great", hehe that was cool. But on the last stanza...I really got hung up on the last sentence..it didn't make any sense to me.

And so not I'm sure there's
A reason why we fell apart

I didn't get that...but the rest of the poem was great.

Kris
| Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this piece of work, it really conveys the emotions of hate and happiness, as if they were battleing. I dunno that's just what i got, I know how it is, I think I like this one so much because I kinda just did the same thing. Well anyways I like the piece.
Georgina
| Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Raye | [ Reply to This ]
  This could be a great piece about moving on to better things but with some speeling errors & word misplacement, it was kind of confusing. I understood the point of your piece & I've 'been there, done that' but it needs revision.
~Tonya
| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Tonya V. | [ Reply to This ]


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