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Buried Feelings


Author: whchong
ASL Info:    26 / M / Malaysia
Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 93 /43 /14
Words: 153
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Description:


Of a simple deed


Buried Feelings



To him, it was a simple act of kindness
For her, it was the key that unlocked her heart

She was brought up that way
To be able to stand on her own
She had been independent for so long
She had forgotten how much relief tears could bring

He was like any ordinary passerby
Easily forgotten and insignificant
Yet he was the one who held out his hand
Where others told her to rise on her own

His hand was warm
While his presence was comforting
In his absence
The silence and emptiness were heartbreaking

She sat alone in her room
Her tears flowing freely
She wanted to let him know
That the creeping cold frightened her
That the ache within was unbearable
That she wanted to be with him
That she needed to be with him

If only she would tell him...
If only he knew...




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  This is excellent both in its story, and in the philosophical and very deep meaning cloaked within the verse. We are brought into this world alone, and will go out alone, and part of life's struggle is to learn to be content with our aloneness. But we are social beings, and constantly seek the company of others and strive to find a special someone who is trustworthy and whom we can bond with and for a moment escape our aloneness!

The amazing and touching human story here is wonderful, and the suspense at the ending is brilliant!
| Posted on 2008-09-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  I somehow feel that I am that girl sometimes. Very deep insight to what seems to be ordinary but, between the lines, there is something much deeper than another passerby
| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by BrokenStream | [ Reply to This ]
  I somehow feel that I am that girl sometimes. Very deep insight to what seems to be ordinary but, between the lines, there is something much deeper than another passerby
| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by BrokenStream | [ Reply to This ]
  this is really touching. I hit somwhere in my heart, and it felt very familior. i've benn through something like that. Good job on getting it down right
sweetme
| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by sweetme16 | [ Reply to This ]
  this song reminds me much of the love i have lost becuse i was to shy to tell and for that i paid deeply.. you have a very good seans of style and i like that i have added this to my favorites list and you are very good poem artist
so please keep on writeing and you will go far ok

shy girl

Over and Out

ps great job
| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by shygirl | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem sounds much like a song. The story behind it is very emotional, though I feel that this piece could've been better in prose form. While it is a good work, the fact that it's written in verses seems to make it stumble. Or at least that's the way I see it.
| Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Kalyiel | [ Reply to This ]


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