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    dots Submission Name: The Waydots
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    Author: MaxHam
    ASL Info:    20/m/NH USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 60/131/105
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 820
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 592



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       Man that certain "friend" of mine is good poetry material haha.


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    dotsThe Waydots
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    I am running down the road.
    No where to hide, no where to go.
    I am searching for love.
    I am searching for anything.
    I am tired of all the shit!
    I am tired of your mind games!
    When will you let me go?
    When will I be free?
    Your greed consumes you as you act like everything is fine.
    But it is not, you seek answers
    We both seek answers
    I cannot help you, you need to help yourself.
    Quit the smoking, the drinking and the drugging first, then we will talk.
    If not, I will go, I will get out, I will walk.




    Submitted on 2006-01-03 15:34:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow... I've never been able to put into right words how I felt about my boyfriend with all his drinking and smoking, etc etc... but that was powerful. It's simple, but still conveys a super strong message. Very well written. Keep on keepin' on.
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by disturbed420 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a very good poem.It seems to say alot more to me than wat u actually wrote.But it makes sens.I dont really see ne thing that u cud do to make it ne better.Its perfect.its sorda how i feel..kinda weird lol.Well keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by suicidal_chick | [ Reply to This ]


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