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    dots Submission Name: A World Left Smilingdots
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    Author: corruptedspirit
    ASL Info:    26/Male/England (Swindon
    Elite Ratio:    5.38 - 160/185/56
    Words: 336
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 241
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    Bytes: 1988



    Description:
       I know, i'm not really the happiness type, but i've had one of those great days that seem to make you feel almost invincible and i want everyday to be the same. I know it needs a few tweaks but i don't get inspired to write happy pieces often lol... Although they are becoming a tad more frequent.....


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    World get out the way because i'm coming back,
    I'll focus on the positives and forget the things i lack,
    I'll leave the past where it is and that's far behind,
    I will look to the future and the path i wish to find.

    Negativity leaves me bored and has been more than overdone,
    I need to stop brooding on the downs and concentrate on fun.
    For the grin i wear now shows that i'm not fake,
    I'll just push forward and forget the mistakes i make.

    Life's a funny thing and can often keep you feeling down,
    I forgot how it feels to wear a smile and ditch my dingy frown,
    Now i've found it, i'll never be letting go,
    I'll keep my grin upon my face and forever let it show.

    And if i can do it you can too,
    It's hurts keep feeling sad and blue
    Anyone that hurts you or tries to make you cry
    Just smile very sweetly and look them in the eye.

    Don't regret your failures, or let them haunt your dreams,
    Net let them sneak up on you or start to gnaw your seams,
    Fill your life with a lasting and guiding light,
    Stick to the path you chose, never lose your sight.

    Pass a smile to stranger passing on the street,
    Keep it beaming and show it to anyone you meet,
    The world can be a happy place you just need to start a chain,
    When you start a new joy filled morn begin the link again.

    I hope this poem bought at least a tiny grin,
    Otherwise why the hell did i begin?
    I know it's a hard and gruelling task,
    Try it just once, that's all i'm here to ask.

    So keep your new friend happiness right there by your side,
    Leave your house head held high showing all your pride,
    I'll look forward to smiles on many faces,
    And hope love is found in some funny places.




    Submitted on 2006-01-03 15:59:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well Danny, I must say I'm impressed.

    I checked this out cause I came across it on a friend's favourite list and the title caught my eye. It certainly is wonderful to hear such inspiring words, especially from you.

    Good job you did posting this,

    DeepDreamer2008
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ]
      The first line for me seemed a bit nonsensical. Kind of made me chuckle (not in a bad way, don't mistaken me). Do you really want the world to get out of the way? I hope not. If you didn't mean it like that, I would suggest you choose something like this: World behold because i'm coming back. But that's not the best example possible.

    "And if i can do it you can too,
    It's hurts keep feeling sad and blue"
    That would be my two most favorite lines in this poem. They're simple, but very wise, touching, and encouraging. Like someone from some movie said (yes, very specific of me, ha!), "What one man can do, another can do." Sadness and anger are feelings that, at times, come unexpectedly. Certainly, whatever happened, must have been unpleasant. However, sulking about it for a long time does you no good. Like someone once said (again, very specific), "Happiness is a choice that requires effort at times." Indeed, there is much if not absolute wisdom behind these words. We can change our negativity around. We can be joyful. With a little bit of effort. But it is all worthwhile in the end.

    Your poem was wonderful. It holds an intensive power for people of any age of whatever circumstances they're going through. This poem has accurate words to heal, to bring optimism, resolution, and hope. I praise you!

    And thank you for your kind words regarding to a dear friend. I'm happy to know that it has given you a lesson. If you're interested, I have modified it a bit. Perhaps it's even better than it was before.

    Take care.
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]
      *blinks* The first line threw me off a bit, you didn't finish part of it.

    World get out the because i'm coming back

    The what?? lol. Get outta the way? That's how it sounds, but I could be wrong.

    This is wierd, I'm not used to reading happy stuff. I like the dark and depressing. But, this was good. It flows really well, which is expected from you. Out of the things of yours that I've read, they all flow well. There's just a few little bumps in the road.

    All in all great job! It didn't help me feel better, but I'm sick so nothing but Robitussin PM and cough drops can make me feel better, but it is really inspiring. I'm gonna fave it so I can read it anytime I'm feeling down.

    Greater than frosted flakes, Danny!

    Sammy
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Raven_TheWolf | [ Reply to This ]



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