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    dots Submission Name: A Talkdots
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    Author: dawn_voluptre23
    ASL Info:    18-Female-N.C. A&T
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 20/25/8
    Words: 410
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 224
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2415



    Description:
       I know it may be a little hard to tell who is talkin when but I could not get a color scheme going though I tried. For those who have already read this then maybe you'll notice that I have edited this some.


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    dotsA Talkdots
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    Father, are you there
    Please tell me you hear my payer
    Please let me know that you hear my plea
    I herd you answered sinners, see

    Yes I do, so what can I do for you

    Tell me why do you keep letting things happen
    What did I do?
    You said that you forgive
    But what can you see where you live

    What?! I see all I know all
    Especially when one of my faithful calls

    Oh really
    And I guess you're there carying me when I fall
    Great and powerful GOD


    And who are you to question me!
    I spat out the seven seas!
    I made kings bow down to me!
    I am the I am!
    I told the stars to shine at night!
    I rose mountains with my might!
    I made the darkness fade for the light!
    I am the I am!
    And where were you when these were done?!
    Where were you when I gave my son?!

    But Father... My life had not begun

    Exactly...
    I made you in my image
    In the image of man
    I made you with my own hand
    I made you out of dust and sand
    And I breathed in to you life
    And you wander why I test you constantly
    I gave you life eternally
    I just want to test your loyalty

    But Lord why do you keep lettin’ Satin try me

    Child have you not read my word
    If you'd listened you'd have herd
    He cant do anything with out my say so
    Just call out my name and he's got to go

    So if you know whets goin' to happen
    Why don't you stop it then
    Instead of lettin' hard ships begin

    You know what happened to the disciples on the boat

    O the story your apostle wrote
    So that’s what you want me to do

    Yes the same applies to you
    But why can’t I see you
    Feel you

    But child you do
    It’s my smile in the sun rise
    My pain in the rain
    My kiss in the wind
    You can’t escape me no matter where you're at
    I love you know that

    Lord I know now
    That I'm just a man
    Some things I'm just not meant to understand
    I'm sorry I questioned your glory
    Now I have a testimony
    Now I have a story





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    ||| Comments |||
      Very good! I agree maybe a color scheme to help those reading to sort the conversation. I think that there where some spelling errors and a couple of rough spots. However, I do believe that this one has a lot to say and with a little work this can become a masterpiece! Like, I heard you answered sinners, people like me. That would sound good too. Just some thoughts. Great Poem and I added it to my favorites. Please let me know if you edit it, I would love to re-read this! Good Luck and God Bless, Dawn
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]
      great moral to the story :) I loved the poem but there were a lot of spelling mistakes and would be easier to follow if you seperated where God talked by a different color or an extra space, I'm hoping this is a rough draft as there is punctuation missing in a lot of needed areas, such as "What! I see all! I know all!" or something like that. that is how I'm reading it like God is yelling ..
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by rosered | [ Reply to This ]
      Amen.
    Rather long, good 'story'. t
    he "I am the I am" was bit unclear to me, what dyou mean? If I were you, i'd push the enter button once and a while, it would be much clearer who is talking at what time.
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Darth Zeus | [ Reply to This ]



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