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    dots Submission Name: The Last Adventure!dots
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    Author: obaid
    ASL Info:    19/M/Delilah's heart
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 123/87/32
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 285
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    Description:
       dis is d 1st gothic poetry dat i've writtten, so pleeze try and appreciate it rather than pick on small details.


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    dotsThe Last Adventure!dots
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    Staring at the red sun; walking with the dwindling light.
    A wayfarer- haggard and weary; once a brave knight!

    She stood by the gate- anxious and not a bit bored.
    The wayfarer sensed no evil- but it was surely "the forsaken road!"

    "Oh ye poor soul! Step into my house and get rid of your weariness!"
    'But I can never repay you for your kindness'
    "You do me favour by giving me company- and I've a lonely heart which I offer to thee!"
    'You're surely an angel- for you've offered both kindness and love to me!'

    He ate like a king and soon his health was restored to him.
    She brewed him wine and he drank to his brim!
    Days passed with the rising and setting of the sun!
    She loved him and hugged him; her true identity the wayfarer was soon to learn!

    "This is the portrait room my love; the only room you haven't seen!"
    'Lively pictures of bold men? Were they your fanatics my dear queen?'

    There was no reply but a silence followed that chilled even the bravest spine!
    An utter of strange words! A new portrait on the wall- the wayfarer was frozen in time!
    Before numerous portraits there stood a daemon!
    It laughed with satisfaction and then, ....... turned human!




    Submitted on 2006-01-04 04:31:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Dude, it's as if u're getting lessons from the great saaber shoyeb himself.....hehehe. Keep it up, nothing more to say, the poetry is perfect!
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]
      Don't be so hard on yourself - this was well done & had great flow & content.

    I liked how you used wayfarer & I loved the ending! How creative
    Great job!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smiles 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]



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