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Misunderstood!


Author: obaid
ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148 /93 /34
Words: 157
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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it's all about the rage that boils in you when you are blamed for sth u haven't done.


Misunderstood!



Haven't you noticed that its always me
-the one who is at fault.
"Criminal;crook;thief"- you've called
For long my conscience with evil- has brawled.
What I mean is very simple-
Simple enough for you people to understand.
That if a mistake's been committed-
don't chant my name and don't cuff me by the hand!

Is it because i was always the silent one
-the one who never meddled with your kind?
or is it that I kindled your jealousy-
and you decided to pull me (in society) a step behind?

You drew the ones who loved me
-away like I was spreading a plague!
You can plead all you want- you can say it was a mistake!
Revenge- does that bring some sense into you?
Retaliation- you've still got no clue?
You've infuriated me- you've ignited the fire pretty good!
I've changed- I'm different- all because I was misunderstood.




Submitted on 2006-01-04 04:37:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yet another poem of yours i like. This is really strong. I've never actually been blamed for something someone else did...it was always my brothers fault...and it really was.
Misunderstood!
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Haven't you noticed that its always me
-the one who is at fault.
"Criminal;crook;thief"- you've called
For long my conscience with evil- has brawled.

Love it!
Keep it up!

*darkwinged*
| Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]
  This was pretty good
The only thing i would change would be to check out your spelling and grammers errors in this piece. other than that it was good. alot of good lines and [censored] like that.
My fave line was

"That if a mistake's been committed-
don't chant my name and don't cuff me by the hand"

well hope to hear from you and keep up the good work.
| Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
  Very strong piece. I think you did a great job making me feel your pain, rage, frustration, and just being made to feel bad about yourself. Yes there were some spelling errors but that can be fixed easily. Keep up the great writing. Good Luck and God Bless, Dawn
| Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]
  Besides a few spelling errors this poem is very powerful! I mean it has me feeling the rage that you must have felt when you wrote this poem. Very good!
| Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, really emotional and raw. A few spelling mistakes but thats not important. The last line ties it together brilliantly and the image of a perceived plague is very close tot he truth. Fantastic write and I'm goin to add it to my favourites.
| Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Smee | [ Reply to This ]
  its good man real good...
That if a mistake's been committed-
don't chant my name and don't cuff me by the hand
You drew the ones who loved me
-away like I was spreading a plague
i like those lines keep up the good work...check out my stuff n lz comment...
| Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by anooplokur | [ Reply to This ]


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