Description: As a lover of paint shop pro, I found the attached pic, played, was inspired, and came up with this. Just a little Haiku...I enjoy toying with them on occasion.
Essence of Love -------------------------------------------
I like the picture that you posted with the poem. Why did you choose haiku for a form? The form lends itself to such concrete subject matter--expressing the universal in the smallest moments. Your idea seems too "big" for such a small form. (beautiful as the words actually are) I am no expert in haiku, but I do love the idea of an "american" haiku. Maybe we need more syllables in our american haiku! I think I am starting to see how this site works. I had to download netscape so I could post comments.
I enjoyed both the image, and the haiku. They fit perfectly. I loved the expression "celestial hopes" - it was like a shining little star in your haiku. Though...I did get the feeling that it should heve been a poem of just a couple of verses more. But it was a very nice lecture!
This is so interesting I took this write as a fortune teller reading ones future and thinking of something creative to say You really captured this image with me and the picture fit perfectly God Bless Your Friend Ron
Hmmm...hopes and dreams are the essence of her love? When does she know when her hope and dream has come true? Will she still know the essence of love or will the reality of it cause her to stop loving? Or will her love evolve and embrace the reality that her hopes and dreams have come true? Man...I like haikus (bless u) for those reasons...the good ones, such as this one, make a reader think and contemplate very different conotations from just three simple lines. Good stuff maynard. Although a traditional haiku (bless u) is supposed to be about nature...I liked this one just as well. Thanks for sharing.
>.<! I wish I could see the picture but alas my school has blocked every picture around :) thats ok though.. as a haiku this was good... I'm not fond of the style but hey :) it worked!
Submission Name: Essence of Love
They fit perfectly. I loved the expression "celestial hopes" - it was like a shining little star in your haiku. Though...I did get the feeling that it should heve been a poem of just a couple of verses more. But it was a very nice lecture! 