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    dots Submission Name: Essence of Lovedots
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    Author: KimmyMim
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 223/303/117
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Haiku/Love
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    Description:
       As a lover of paint shop pro, I found the attached pic, played, was inspired, and came up with this. Just a little Haiku...I enjoy toying with them on occasion.


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    dotsEssence of Lovedots
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    Modest sentiments
    of celestial hopes and dreams.
    Essence of her love.




    Submitted on 2006-01-04 07:52:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the picture that you posted with the poem.
    Why did you choose haiku for a form? The form lends itself to such concrete subject matter--expressing the universal in the smallest moments. Your idea seems too "big" for such a small form. (beautiful as the words actually are) I am no expert in haiku, but I do love the idea of an "american" haiku. Maybe we need more syllables in our american haiku!
    I think I am starting to see how this site works. I had to download netscape so I could post comments.
    | Posted on 2006-02-26 00:00:00 | by mariaz | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed both the image, and the haiku. They fit perfectly. I loved the expression "celestial hopes" - it was like a shining little star in your haiku. Though...I did get the feeling that it should heve been a poem of just a couple of verses more. But it was a very nice lecture!
    | Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by Kalyiel | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the picture, all the sparkly's kinda distracted me from the poem...haha. but not to worry, I read it. all I have to say "awesome job"

    peace always
    JJ
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Sweethonesty | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so interesting
    I took this write as a fortune teller reading ones future and thinking of something creative to say
    You really captured this image with me and the picture fit perfectly
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm...hopes and dreams are the essence of her love? When does she know when her hope and dream has come true? Will she still know the essence of love or will the reality of it cause her to stop loving? Or will her love evolve and embrace the reality that her hopes and dreams have come true? Man...I like haikus (bless u) for those reasons...the good ones, such as this one, make a reader think and contemplate very different conotations from just three simple lines. Good stuff maynard. Although a traditional haiku (bless u) is supposed to be about nature...I liked this one just as well. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      >.<! I wish I could see the picture but alas my school has blocked every picture around :) thats ok though.. as a haiku this was good... I'm not fond of the style but hey :) it worked!

    Good job
    -Alli
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]


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