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    dots Submission Name: Turn it down (version I)dots
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    Author: Zu
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 446/379/76
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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       i wrote two songs on the same topic. having trouble deciding which one to try to put music on. or both. please, need advice. and by the way, all of this isnt directly related to me. probably sub conscious, i'm not really sure. but anyway here it is.


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    The sound rages on
    As does your tired mind
    Heavy pounding
    Don't know what's the time
    Walk in a daze
    Told you let it be
    You never listen
    You don't wanna see…

    And they tell you to turn it down…

    The speaker's blaring
    The noise in your mind
    It's amplifying
    Time after time
    Lets you escape
    The cold reality
    Into your prison
    So you can't see
    But they tell you to turn it down…

    Burnt, smoked stubs
    Litter the ashtray
    Heavy smog around
    End of another day
    There's a war
    Going on deep inside
    You can't show it
    You can only lie.

    But they tell you to turn it down…

    The speaker's blaring
    The noise in your mind
    It's amplifying
    Time after time
    Lets you escape
    The cold reality
    Into your prison
    So you can't see
    But they tell you to turn it down…

    Sometimes you cry because
    Of the prayers that god actually hears
    Rather than the one's that's forgotten
    There's nothing over the edge of the table
    But you still wonder "What if?"
    And go down under, down away…

    The speaker's blaring
    The noise in your mind
    It's amplifying
    Time after time
    Lets you escape
    The cold reality
    Into your prison
    So you can't see
    And they tell you to turn it down…

    There's a "don't disturb" sign on your mind
    Cause you forgot how to turn it down…




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      thanks a lot for the insightful comment. you don't see a lot of those around anymore.
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Zu | [ Reply to This ]
      Really good music is designed to be played loud, especially if you're using it to escape for just a little while. I like that message here, summarized by the final stanza.

    Since I consider myself somewhat spiritual, I picked up on your "Sometimes you cry because
    Of the prayers that god actually hears
    Rather than the one's that's forgotten". I recognize such tears as those of joy. Just for good measure I always capitalize that particular G.

    There's also a saying that all prayers are answered, it's just that sometimes the answer is no. I could not follow that any would be forgotten, hopefully just delayed. If it's earnest and repeatedly done, a prayer may be answered just to get you to stop worrying the Lord about it so much. (Scriptural)

    As to the category of "depressed", a lot of what I've seen given that label might move more into teen angst than actual depression. Sometimes it's a fine line, I understand, but since I've never been prone to either, I'm no expert. I have witnessed what real depression does, and it's very serious. Cigs and drugs in general are bad news, though, and the sooner people figure that out, the better off they are.

    I can't say much about any form of lyrics such as this unless I hear it after it's put to music since that's such a large component of what makes both into a song, however, I'm very impressed with what our younger writers such as yourself accomplish on this site.

    No song was ever ruined by being too emotional.
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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