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Love or Fear?


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 123
Class/Type: Poetry /Trapped
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Love or Fear?



The clock ticks out of time
You fall to the floor
Nothing seems right anymore
The yelling
The screaming
It echoes in your ears
Rings out like a phone unanswered
The sharp
And stabbing words
Into your mind it sears
Forever changing who you are
Your eyes bleed your sorrow
Reality becomes a nightmare
You wish you could forget-
The pain inflicted
Seeps into your soul
Slicing you from the inside out-
Everyday,
The threshold of hope
Dims out in the distance
Longingness for freedom
Tightend its grip around your heart
The war to escape
Appears almost lost
Desires to retreat
Urge your legs
But..
Something weighs you at your feet,
Fear trembles your hands-
But is the love you see really there?




Submitted on 2006-01-05 05:01:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You have managed to fit some very strong and profound statements into this, my fav being "Reality becomes a nightmare"

i love how you have answered questions heilighted in the poem and your use of imagery can not be faulted!
| Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
  hey! just thought ill stop by! this is good! actually its better than good! i can relate to this a lot! when my family argues things are said that i never think actually ever get forgiven no matter how many times ppl say im sry! theres was a lot of emotion in this! good job!
~akaila evonne~
| Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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