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    dots Submission Name: toucheddots

    Author: secretdream0
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 48/46/22
    Words: 18
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 804
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       short and sweet.
    not like my other poems. trying something new.
    not sure if i like it.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    He touched my lips

    He touched my hand

    He touched my heart

    And love began.

    Submitted on 2006-01-05 07:04:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it. It short and to the point good job. it does a freat job of teeling how love begins. You style shines through
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by sweetme16 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this! Short, but nice! It's a sweet little piece that captures! Take care with this style, though! Other subjects may not be pictured as well with such a scheme...
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Kalyiel | [ Reply to This ]
      its amazing how this is so short, but so beautiful, and so true. well done. not many people can write such a short poem that has so much feeling.
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by xana_jackson | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing, I think it can be really difficult to convey emotions through so few words but in all honesty thats how love works. I dont think that many poets can manage to produce such a simple and effective message. Keep writing and I will definitely read more of your work.

    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Smee | [ Reply to This ]
      this is short and sweet and pefect! i like love poems! this is excatly how love begins! this waz simple and easy to understand and relate to! good job!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, that really is short and sweet! i'm not a great fan of love poems, but this just sums everything about love up so perfectly that if it were any longer it would just spoil the whole effect. This style is good in convaying the simple profound message, but i dont think that it would work for every poem. however, it definatly does in this one!
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]

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