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    dots Submission Name: Goodbye my love ( revised)dots
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    Author: sweetme16
    ASL Info:    18/f/who cares
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 108/249/159
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 225
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       i just edited this. comments please


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    dotsGoodbye my love ( revised)dots
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    When I look to the clouds
    I see you
    When I look at another man
    I see you
    Why is that I suppose?
    I left you when I loved another
    I screamed when you didn’t leave,
    Then I smiled when you were gone
    Is it just that fact that I know you are gone,
    Or is it that I know you’ll come back?
    I won’t know if I don’t try,
    I see you sit there wondering why
    Then I leave and know that if I come back,
    You won’t find anyone to love because love is intimate
    Then I think to myself if I love him then
    I’ve got to let him go
    Goodbye my love
    Goodbye




    Submitted on 2006-01-05 12:25:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can really feel the emotion behind it. loved the last four lines, really made me think about a lot of sruff, most of it kinda private, but the way you describe leaving him, makes me think of how precious time together is. so yeah, keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by forever_yours | [ Reply to This ]



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