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    dots Submission Name: Forever And Alwaysdots
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    Author: Autum-Moon
    ASL Info:    15/Female/drowing
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 284/165/29
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 796
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       This is a poem to the one I love Andy. You can let me know what you think of it and I am interested in anyway I can change it.


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    dotsForever And Alwaysdots
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    I'll give you every piece of me,
    Every kiss, every touch,
    Every smile is yours to hold.

    I love the light of your smile,
    The taste if your lips,
    And the warmth of your touch.


    Every night you fill my dreams,
    I feel your sweet touch deep inside me,
    And in silence I smile.

    I love every piece of you,
    for it fits so perfectly
    with every part of me.

    You' re my everything
    Forever and Always,
    I will love you.




    Submitted on 2006-01-05 15:26:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is beautiful. It gives of an intense feeling of love, brilliant.
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by liamzamudio | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good, happy poem :-) Makes you feel okay.

    I don't always like to read depressing or generally sad poems... Not as much as I may write them anyway.

    You're a good poet.
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by KasPeR88 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. Do you listen to H.I.M.? It sounds like "Gone With the Sin." I like how it's about love and romantic without being really sappy or emo. good job.


    ~Luna
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by White_Ink | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey,

    Good poem. The simplicity does make it seem, I don't know diffrent in a good way. It makes you look inside yourself, for a way to comprehend it all.

    *Let it Flow*
    Raven
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Silent_Tears | [ Reply to This ]
      how can you do something justice, when it has been so wonderfully written, but the subject matter leaves you cold?
    this simple style is so refreshing, as most poets tend to try and dazzel the reader with fancy imagery, metaphors and other devises, but this poem dazzels simply because its...well, simple!
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
      Aside from like one or two minor spelling errors i think the simplicity of this piece is what makes it. I've always felt that in order to capture love in a poem, often-times the best way IS to use small, short stanzas, and simple yet eloquent vocabulary. I appreciated this piece for that.
    thank you for sharing and keep up the good work!

    Meow!
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]
      the love poems alwaz make me look at the indifference of life and love
    forever is along time and alwaz only last while yor in love, sometimes when you lay all yor cards on the table like you have you wind up getting kicked in the butt
    anywaz no bad intent given just my opinion of love at the age of 40 something
    nice write
    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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