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    dots Submission Name: Thy Angeldots
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    Author: lisa21
    Elite Ratio:    0.23 - 0/1/2
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       
    This poem was written for my boyfriend, as he asked me to write one about angels personally for him, inwhich he got it tattooed on his back. any feedback is welcome and comments,etc.


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    dotsThy Angeldots
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    Thy Angel cherishes I, true of my angel

    a blessing from above,

    She wraps her radiant wings around my heart

    and guides me with her love.

    Her shining halo surrounds her,

    holding her golden harp close as her choir sings of joy.

    So when my fate on this earth shall end,

    take me under your wings and fly me to heavens gate.




    Submitted on 2006-01-05 15:58:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i think you still need to work on the Intro
    the rest of the stanzas are fine

    My love is like a cherished glow
    off a crystal light shining through
    true blessings from above

    this is my suggestion please be free to use it if
    would like

    welcome to the site
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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