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    dots Submission Name: Desires Fulfilleddots
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    Author: AlabamaFarmGirl
    ASL Info:    50/F/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 518/333/26
    Words: 270
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1159
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    Bytes: 1625



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       Thinking of those that are alone...


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    Walking rather fast down a hospital hall
    Dazed collided into a man rather tall
    Excuse me he said as he steadied her
    Her mind already in a lonesome blur
    New Years she had spent all alone
    Watching a movie as she sit at home
    Feeling sorry for herself, this she knew
    She was feeling lonely, sad and blue
    Glancing up at this beautiful face
    Embarrassed feeling so out of place
    He reached out and took her arm
    Making sure she had come to no harm
    Barely was she able to even speak
    As she began to tingle and feel so weak
    Man, he looked good that was for sure
    The fluttering feeling, there was no cure
    He was looking at her with such concern
    That her face began to flush and burn
    She was beginning to feel like a fool
    Staring at him, not knowing what to do
    Unable to move, not knowing what to say
    Tingling as he touched her in this way
    A feeling of such longing rose within
    She looked up at him as she grinned
    Looking deeply into each others eyes
    What they wanted took neither by surprise
    For chemistry and attraction was surely there
    She wanted to go with him away from here
    As he watched her, he began to understand
    He gently reached down to take her hand
    Her needs he was determine to fulfill
    He seen her loneliness deep and very real
    They both needed each other that night
    For at this moment it seemed so right
    Tonight they would give in and let it be
    A night of passion and being free




    Submitted on 2006-01-05 16:34:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A lovely love story and a lovely poem! I like the pleasant association and the mental pictures this poem created!
    | Posted on 2007-05-05 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      A well flowing fantastic story, I was hooked from the start and given a rythmic story of imagery, sensuality and satisfaction that they hooked up in the end...(There is hope, I just need to time falling down next time)

    Very well written, I'm glad I stumbled into this and must read more...such flow and in the midst of a great story, very rare and very well done

    Lisa
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      This one took me by surprise...starting out in a hospital I thought someone was going to die or something...I never expected to end up in bed with a stranger I bumped into in the hall. This told a good little storey with excellent details.
    DJ
    | Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      Gosh Darn, I thought I had already commented on this one. I read it the other day and liked it much. Quite an imagination here. Very vivid description of a chance meeting and what it can bring if one goes along with it
    Your poems seem to always have a good story behind them.

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Linda,

    this was a wonderful read. I became so engrossed in the story that I didn't even realize how well rhymed it was until I read it again. It flowed well. We all wish for a magic "encounter" like this one.

    You are a good story teller! This was very romantic and sensual.

    Had I known you would be alone New Years Eve I would have flown there and showed you some REAL fireworks!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      i really really enojoyed reading this! its a nice romantic story! the flow waz good! this is beautifully written and a well put together piece!goodjob!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I never had some guy sweep me back to my hospital bed and make wild love to me...I know now, collide into him. lol. I'm glad I read this. I liked the building of lust between these two people. It was very realistic about the patteren of the feelings. I loved the easy flow of this and I liked the way you gave us details. A very nice touch to the poem. Very nice work.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Nothing wrong with a chance meeting and free passion...lol

    Loved the story feel this had...some of the rhyming was a bit off but it still didnt throw a wrench in the flow...

    Tina
    EGB
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      Extremely well written
    I saw a lot of my own family and Life in this write
    This one really captured a lot of emotion as all your writes do
    I hope everything is going well for you
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron

    Keep that emotion and love alive you captured with this write
    I loved this
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked how you formatted this with no punctuation and how easily the flow was - fast but clear and with a sensation the same - to see where all this was going.
    I had a flash picture of that scene in City of Angels where Nick Cage is admiring and comforting Meg Ryan but she doesn't really know where the warmth she is feeling is coming from.
    Very well done hot mama!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smiles 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      MAN woman! You need to get off daydream blvd and merge onto good lovin' lane, HA!

    Beep-beep!

    This was quite a nice tale although it be lonely and all...the moment you described was done brilliantly as always!

    Watching a movie as she sit at home

    Should that be sat at home? Sorry for finding another spelling error! Omelette it slide for now, HA!

    Thanks for sharing and keep smilin' Linda!
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Somehow it just don't seem fair, when I was in the hospital all I got was adovan and demerol!
    I must say this was a cute poem though, just goes to show ya that you never know when or where that special monent might happen.
    Enjoyed the read Linda,
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, When I go to the hospital I don't get that kind of service. What Hospital is that?
    Oh well, I'll take my wife to the hospital and trip her so she can fall into my arms. Nah with my luck she will end up breaking her leg and then I would never be able to look her in the eye again. So much for romance.

    You just got over the flu and you are writing these romance poems. What did you do, load up on vitamen C,D,A and E oh forgot B too.

    Good to see you back with Passion in your pen.

    Very nice write Linda

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      I've gotta go to the hospital more often, if that tripping think works and I catch enough of them there gals maybe I'll be the knight for a night!
    I suppose i'll need to pick and choose my victims huh?
    The places I visit, all the people stagger and fall into things, and thats just at work, I'd end up paying comp for the rest of my dying days.
    Do happy endings still happen in real life? Hmmmm!
    I guess so, because I liked this pretty good.
    SEE you around there Sniffles
    Later
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Linda,

    The sentiment in this was very nice and very clear. A chance meeting between two people. She alone, and perhaps vulnerable, and he, there at the right place, at the right time.

    A chance meeting, sparking a chemistry and a sense of want to fill the void, if not for ever, then at least for a night.

    A very efective and very good write.

    Frank.

    PS Hope you are feeling better.
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading this poem. Not only does it tell a story quite nicely, allowing the reader to bring vivid mental imagery to mind; but it also has a certain flow that while broken in some places, manages to keep up perfectly with the feelings of the two. A very beautiful piece and well-written! good job!

    Meow!
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]


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