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Rose That Grew From Concret


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 44
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This Poem was inspired by Tupac (my idols) poem A Rose that grew from concret. So tell me what you think.


Rose That Grew From Concret



I'm that rose that grew from concret
when noone gave a shit
walking down the road alone
no one helping alittle bit
the rapper and the poet
whose feelings are now bared
i'm that rose that grew from a crack
when noone even cared!




Submitted on 2006-01-05 17:24:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this a lot and i knwo a lot of people will be able to relate ot it... including me. keep up the awesome work.
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tina
| Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
  i like it as it is. short and simple. if u try to expand it, u may end up losing the focus and straying from the point that ur trying to make. this one's still good. "cuz a rose is still a rose. baby girl, you're still a flower"
| Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  good start, very Green Day-esque...i agree with man in the mirror...you've got good ideas but you should elaborate a bit. its got a really raw, pure feeling to it , keep it up
| Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by kma12790 | [ Reply to This ]
  you gotta work more to make it longer...your [censored] is good, but you gotta expand your Idea...so that its not just a cut and dry piece you know what I mean, I really like the way you write...but its so short

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the aberrant soldier
| Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
  short, sweet and very moving!
the rhyme in some places distracts from the poems meaning, but i think that the goodness of the context and emotions cancels this!
We all feel like that sometimes, but it just shows you dont have to have lots of attention to be able to grow into something beautiful!
| Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]


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