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    dots Submission Name: 2 live write and diedots
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    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 812
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1124



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       yeah just a lil sumtin look out for part 2 comin soon


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    dots2 live write and diedots
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    I live 2 write and i write 2 perseve my life
    Life is a game and u gotta know how 2 roll the dice
    Right because i try 2 roll dem snake eyes
    And when a roll a 1 and a 2 i know its my time 2 die
    I just hope i take the elavator up the sky
    But without my pad i dont know how i would get by
    Lyrics like coke they keep niggas very high
    So nice its why im feelin on your girl thigh
    But i write so much cause a nigga 2 be abidextriss
    Rhymes like the food of life ill never be anerexsick
    And leave people throwin up and sick with my flow
    Ask him if he wanna die fast or real slow
    Make a man grap his chest and try 2 breathe
    Then your heart stops and the corner labels u decease
    and again i write 2 live and live 2 write
    It will be obvious then u rest ur head on ur pillow 2 night

    Chorus
    I would gibe everything for just a pen and a pad
    Lay down lyrics so heaqy the call them iron clad
    And imma write for eternity this shit aint a fad
    That why for chrismas all i want is a pen and a pad




    Submitted on 2006-01-05 18:40:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      umm..i kinda liked this one. it wasnt really all that good to me. i mean dont get me wrong. but i liked some of the things yyou said.

    Fore<3r Love,
    xxamber
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      But without my pad i dont know how i would get by
    Lyrics like coke they keep niggas very high

    this one was alright. those two lines stood out to me. i feel the same way sometimes. i need my notebook to survive.
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this Chaz! wow, this was very powerful and thought provoking. You said how I feel about writing. I'll do it till I fall dead. It was brief, but that was just fine. I'd love to see you add more to this. I am very impressed. Yup, you are back baby boi! Great job.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      um.. This was a good write. But I do see room for a little more work. You might want to go back and look over it some I see some typeo's. And kind of work on the flow because there are some rough spots. But all in all I did enjoy reading it.
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by dawn_voluptre23 | [ Reply to This ]


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