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    dots Submission Name: Deaddots
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    Author: jcantrell
    ASL Info:    17 M MTL
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 10/14/5
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1481
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    Would you walk alongside my arm?
    From the front of my house to my car?
    It wouldn't be hard to play along
    With the passing of the seasons

    The wind would cool our hearts
    Just like the sun once did
    And we would remember our dead youth.




    Submitted on 2006-01-05 19:51:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It seems like you captured a moment when you meet an old partner or lover that you haven't seen in a while, and is comforting to know and feel their temperment and smile because it's familiar. I really like this poem, it has that dry relaxed feeling of knowing someone well and remembering simlple memeories.
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by basement gypsy | [ Reply to This ]


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