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Psychic Skin


Author: Indigo Kid
ASL Info:    33/f/everywhere
Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 428 /438 /115
Words: 131
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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Psychic Skin



I love your valleys and shadows;
how they look under the lights,
so velvet and smooth with
my heart beating in time
with you.

Being guided by the music and
your motion moving the air
around you and so eloquently
into me with swirls that influence
everyone in the room.

How slippery I feel when
I am there with you on that floor;
the melding of us rolling into
one another with rhythmic silence
and pulsing sound.

Your hands and how they are so
coordinated with my mind
and how you know exactly
what I am thinking right now
at this very moment as I write this
and how you are thinking the very
same thing…




Submitted on 2006-01-06 01:49:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  O...M...G...!<-this says it all. Great poem. Though I really like structured rhyming poetry, this has broken my science. I love how the lines blend together. Guess it must be some Psychic thing...
| Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked it i agree with my shadow your talking about sex and being able tounderstand one another with out words rite? like the connection you have rite? I had that with the girl of my dreams but hey all good things come to an end sooner or later
| Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]
  Wonderful poem. Real feeling of love. I like the movement and interplay. The site insists I write more than the previous but you don't need advice on writing, you can do it.
| Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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