Description: I really couldn't think of a title for this poem, and I didn't want to call it untitled so i gave it this title, I'm not so sure if it's suitable but oh well!! Enjoy guys!! And thanx for taking time to read it!! Holler!!
If Only... -------------------------------------------
If only there was enough love to share
No more pain would we have to bear
We carry on with our lives and accept the fact
Even if we can see, our world is no longer intact
If only there was enough peace to spread
No more tears would we have to shed
We carry on with our lives and seem strong
Even if we can see our world won’t go on for long
If only there was enough laughter to go around
No more sadness would we have to bound
We carry on with our lives and try not to cry
Even if we can seeour world is slowly passing by
Don't we all wish for a world that's more copeable? I can feel your pain here, and I can understand where you're coming from. Unfortunately, it's the choices of everyone and ourselves that make the world the way it is. But the thought is still a bittersweet one. This was a nice piece, I enjoyed reading it. Your style is crisp and you picked a subject that even though others have written on this, you found a way of making it new. Great job.
I actually wrote a piece on the same suject you chose to write about here.. And on comes the shameless plug... If you have time check out " Co-Existance". You had the same thing in mind as i did you chose a slightly different way to portray your words to me though. If only we could all live in peace huh? What a better world it would be! And if governments and leaders weren't so greedy or self rightous we may be half way there. I can't really fault the way you wrote this you have a structured ryhming scheme you didn't drag it out and the same time it's not to short, so yeah a nice simple little piece, Take Care, Danny
I wholeheartedly agree with you. Our world, day by day, seems to be falling apart. Mostly, I believe, because people harbor so much hate towards others for what ever reasons that they have. I think if every country paid more attention to their own problems and helped out others when they could, this world wouldn't suck as much as it does. I would love nothing more than to be able to watch the news or read a newspaper without having to read or hear the word terrorism, suicide bomber, or anything to do with the hate, violence, and war going on in the middle east.
This poem really hit me hard. Thank you for writing this piece. You got your point across very well, and in a powerful way.
i think this may be my favorite piece yet in content!also, you said that you couldn't think of a title.well i have a suggestion. PERSONALLY I would have called it "If Only...".It almost reminds me of this Poe poem i was reading this morning. the poem was called "Romance",one of my personal favorites. I was thinking about posting it so that i could use it as a reference.
this perect world that you want to form seems nice if only it could happen huh? I like your style alot in this peice i think you did a nice job at getting the point across and makeing what you wanted to say very clear! good right! Thirst4Serenity
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