Description: I am tired of loving this girl, i dont know she love me or not, sometimes i see her like me, but when i am starting it with her, she seems to fade away. Please any comment and polish, i wonder if this one is sweet enough
"Seconds" of Love -------------------------------------------
I dedicate every seconds of my life for your happines
Even i don't have the chance to hold your hand
Even my heart ache painfully, don't look back
As long as you say that you are happy
That's more than enough to let you go
Altough our love will never unite
As long as you never erase my name from your heart
I will keep my eyes open altough its dark enough to see
As long as you still engrave our sweet memories
I will keep dedicate every seconds of my life for you
I still remember that day,
The day when you asked me to wait for your return
I waited until darkness covered the blue sky
I waited until the sky cried and breezing wind stopped blowing
I hope that this just only a nightmare
If i have one second left...
I will tell you how much i love you
I will show you how big my love for you is
I will definitely hold your hand and see tommorow's rainbow together
But......
I had given you all seconds i have....
I realise that i really can't lose you
yeah, i agree with marigold. it's a nice piece, i read it a few times to understand it fully and i got your point, the ending althought, was a bit confusing.
besides some grammer errors, this was quite nicely done, and rather enjoyable to read. maybe you should try some sort of rhyme scheme next time perhaps, but otherwise, good work!
Submission Name: "Seconds" of Love
