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Author: AmazingForever
ASL Info:    16
Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 12 /18 /7
Words: 116
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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This is about him...

A lot of my writings are.. You'll learn that.



Faking who I am,
Faking all my feelings I show on the outside
While holding all the real ones deep inside
Sometimes I wonder if people care,
Sometimes I think they know by the way they stare.
Sometimes I just want to tell people
But I konw they wouldn't understand.
Sometimes all I want is a lending hand.
Just someone to listen,
Who won't judge
Sometimes I think that he is sent from above.
He is the only one who listens.
My Best friend,
No one knows that we're even friends
But we talk every night end on end
We have so much in common
He understands...
... Understands why I fake who I really am.

Submitted on 2006-01-06 10:27:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow this is a really good poem.
And I know what you mean...sometimes we just..fake..
Its good that you have a friend to help you along.
Im here if you ever want to talk.
| Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
  i would have to say that i like this peaice but i feel a bit differently about the fakeing part i mean ihave different personalities foreveryone that i hang out with but its all me no cover up i just feel the need to abdapt to the situation that iam in at the time. Then again i beleave alot of people feel the way you do so ireally liked
| Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]
  Definately part of being a teen!
Everyone moans about people faking who they are, but they're fake themselves...

You got good writing skills too :-)

Nice style - Short and simple - Worth reading...
8/10 or 4/5? Your choice :-P
| Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by KasPeR88 | [ Reply to This ]

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