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    dots Submission Name: Along the Riverbankdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       The last storm completely changed parts of the river - so awesome and so spiritual - really so relevant to life and it's changes so sudden & yet the path is still there - just different
    Enjoy life - create something today!
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    dotsAlong the Riverbankdots

    The water rages
    a 7-year flood
    Brilliant green waters
    flowing mud
    Boundaries broken
    by water & wind
    Rising to power
    & when they rescind
    The path is anew

    I walk along new pebbles
    now making up the bank
    & for all great & weak
    I admire & I thank
    as I stroll along
    Life's riverbank

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      The extended metaphor and symbolism in this is amazing. I will most definately add this one to my favorites, and use it for an upcoming project. Thanks for giving me something to do my report on . Keep going.
    Wishing for more
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      whoa... that's some cool poetry. it leaves a question at the end. like a person wanting a sequal when the book ends with a fuffiling ending... keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by L0RIN | [ Reply to This ]
      Life's riverbank. Very nice!
    I like the imagery, the "in the moment" feel to both parts, and the overall concept of LIFE as a riverbank.

    "for all great & weak
    I admire & I thank"

    To take in the changes of life. To admire it all, and be thankful.
    You have such a way, in your poems, that makes the world seem brighter.

    I enjoyed!

    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      very well-written Tiff!

    I have always found it amazing and awe-inspiring to see the differences in the landscape after a huge flood, fire, catastrophe of sorts. and the beauty of rebirth and new growth always outlasts the horror of the pain that it brings when it destroys. to me it's a perfect shining example of the life cycle and never fails to bring a moment of pause-to-appreciate from me. thanks for sharing this piece!

    | Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]
      first of all, i love rivers... something magical,
    moving and beautiful about them. i love the
    comparison of life to a river flowing and how you walk
    along life's riverbank, things always changing
    and moving and new paths to be walked along.
    peaceful and beautiful, just like you!

    much love,
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good poem with lots of meaning to it. I love the metaphor used here but also the poem about the river and how the storm changed it is good all in itself. But it does go well with how life is too. Things that have been a certain way or followed a certain path can change at the blink of an eye and leaving behind a sense of newness. Life certainly does this as well and you are sooooo right, not gone, just different. Another lovely nature poem by you. I gotta find some inspiration to write pretty soon...somewhere! Hee hee! Take care.

    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Creatively beautiful as always. I love to read your work, it seems to help me in my struggle of everyday life. Nature is where I need to be and you make me feel like I'm there. Thank you

    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice! I loved it. It makes me wish it wasn't soo cold outside...damn monkeys flingin poo at the sun...scared it away. Well...take care o.O
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by Skinwalker | [ Reply to This ]
      Life's riverbank...That is a very good comparison. Riverbanks are prone to constant change - just like our life's are. What flows beneath the bank, is our lives. And one could argue that we should not be standing on the riverbank of life, we should be in the water of our life.

    You got me thinking with this one.

    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      As I read this write I see a river that expelled it's river banks moving in a way it never has before. Overflowing to capacity.
    Then as the waters go down, where water once was now there is mud, new paddles and new ground that you walk with so much wonder. Captured by the normality as if the abnormal never existed.
    Very Nice!
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely done, Princess of Poetry, I adored the structure of stanza 1 with the statement at the end...lovely stuff, very De la Mere.

    As always, you can put me there with you with your words, so very well done

    be happy

    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      happy new year to you and yors another perfect picture of nature you have presented
    very enjoyable read
    hope all is well
    thanx for comments
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a wonderful imagery poem. I love the details given and how you express the feelings you get just by walking along the river bank.
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      Short but very sweet. I like the details you gave about the river and the bank. I loved the imagery and the easy flow of this. I felt like I was walking with you. I think this was very weel written. I liked the way your love for nature stirs others to love it as well. Great job.

    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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