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    dots Submission Name: dark musiciandots
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    Author: EV2884
    ASL Info:    21years/female/michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 53/48/15
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1089
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 468



    Description:
       just looking for someone to tell me if it is good or not


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    dotsdark musiciandots
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    dark musician
    play your sweet music
    let the night sway to
    your melody.
    dark musician
    play a sweet song
    for the lost lovers
    that passes you by
    like long passed ghosts
    that haunt you night after
    night.
    dark musician
    sing me a beautiful melody
    of your heart's true love
    of the night.
    dark musician
    play your dark music
    until the sun rises again




    Submitted on 2006-01-06 18:09:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow..I really like it.I'm like shocked.For a shorter poem its really good.The reputition of the tittle adds to it and the lines are really nice and although it doesn't rhyme, it flows nicely.Write On.
    | Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by giver_of_death | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, that has good flow, and it was also a little sad but with passion, almost like a lost soul, traped in the darkness. i like it, i think it will be a favorate, good job.

    -phil-
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by morriscool4 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm. This was very interesting. After reading it for the first time, I really don't know what to say. Interesting subject matter, though. Good job, though =]
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Yclipse | [ Reply to This ]


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